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Forever
Contributed by
xmistyangel
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Tuesday, 18th March 2008 @ 05:35:36 PM in AEST
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LovePoetry
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forever i shall love you
forever this i swear
forever i will need you to bare more than your share
forever i will say i care
no one dare hurt you or ill be there worst nightmare
forever is a long time
forever only with you
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xmistyangel
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2008-03-18 17:35:36]
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Re: Forever
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by Keisha on
Friday, 21st March 2008 @ 03:52:47 PM AEST
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A little weak at the end but good job.
Keep wrriting, peace be with you.
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Re: Forever
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by Stonedraider23 on
Tuesday, 1st April 2008 @ 01:16:10 PM AEST
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| another lil one good weak ummm well i guess maybe a tiny bit add a lil more feeling to them and make em a lil longer maybe |
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Re: Forever
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by Wachumiri on
Friday, 4th April 2008 @ 04:17:53 PM AEST
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It's short, but it doesn't need to be long to say what it does. Near the end it does stumble a bit, but it's not bad.
Well written.
Do take care.
Me |
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