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oh paramor
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 03:00:00 AM in AEST
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love's passionate affinity is
what the wind is to fires
extinguishing the small
flamingly enkindling desires
previously never quite believing
could be such happiness in this world
between two mortal beings
and love's beauty for the seeing
with your dear love in my life
i am never ever feeling alone
ahh, times i wish we'd met sooner
though would we have known?
those three little words you say
hold my life in them, it is true
so, in simple honest caring return
forever and ever, i love you too
our love is so like a river
ever changing as it flows
and we two just a canoe
that must follow where it goes
*~*
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Re: oh paramor
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by PhantomsLDY on
Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 03:23:31 AM AEST
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| Sometimes how much you really love someone is so hard to put in to words but you did it beautifully. |
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by venkat on
Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 04:15:51 AM AEST
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| you are almost swimming in a heavenly river of love. very lucky. .simply wonderful. venkat |
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by riverofwords on
Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 08:26:22 AM AEST
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beautiful words ..beautiful sentiments ...beautiful expression ...beautiful poem
well done
peace be your journey
terry |
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Re: oh paramor
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by LOWMAN613 on
Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 09:05:50 AM AEST
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| Beautiful words that you painted with your pen! Great write! Christina |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 09:42:57 AM AEST
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| very beautiful write... i love those kinds of poems coz i can't write em like that... i can only write when i'm mad... lol... |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 11:45:28 AM AEST
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AHHHH!!!!!You have taken me on a pleasure cruise.....down the river of love!!!
Wonderful!!! Simply Wonderful!!!
Angel always....Godspeed... 0:-) |
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Re: oh paramor
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by MoonlitAngel on
Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 01:04:39 PM AEST
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I know how you feel! I too have so much trouble putting how I feel about my sweetheart into words! I try, though, over and over, which is probably why I've written so much about him, lol. Beautiful words! Brilliantly done! :D Blessed be,
~ Moonlit Angel
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by wolfflow on
Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 02:58:43 PM AEST
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| i could get lost in this poem and never want to find my way out of it |
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 09:12:40 PM AEST
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| Wonderful write. Beautiful words fitting together perfectly. :) |
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by zeroelysium on
Friday, 14th March 2003 @ 05:03:26 PM AEST
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| if your words were an ocean we wouldd all be drowing in love good one |
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by Lone_er on
Friday, 14th March 2003 @ 05:20:22 PM AEST
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| A very beautiful painting of love rendered by your brush upon our hearts-Thank you---Russ |
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by Valerie_Pearson on
Saturday, 15th March 2003 @ 07:21:10 PM AEST
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| almost made me cry teardrops, how sweet the sound of your heart, this is delightfully beautiful, hugs and love to you, always Val |
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by LadyDama on
Sunday, 16th March 2003 @ 04:00:15 AM AEST
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this poem describes my love for my husband to a tee, down to "ahh, times i wish we'd met sooner
though would we have known?"... how precious this write is and beautifully formed... thank you for this... blessings../ |
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by Bizzy on
Sunday, 16th March 2003 @ 04:17:32 PM AEST
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| Dear Ladyfawn, A lovely, unique thought,... 'we two just a canoe that must follow where it goes.' Very poetic! Bizzy |
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Re: oh paramor
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by springchic1979 on
Sunday, 16th March 2003 @ 07:27:14 PM AEST
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This is such a beautiful and touching poem Nessa. You and wolfflow share such strong feelings. I enjoy reading these tender and passionate poems you write for one another.
Yvonne |
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by Ilhar on
Sunday, 16th March 2003 @ 09:57:09 PM AEST
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awww......i am happy for you
Shari |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 18th March 2003 @ 07:01:35 PM AEST
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You know, normally I'm basically poem illiterate, as I like to call it, but I understood this one. ("Poem illiterate" being because I'm more in to novels then anything else. Lol. Just an interesting daughter you have here, eh?)
Anyway, Mom, I loved it. Really good. ^_^ Interesting title, too.
Hugs, kisses 'n' love,
Mara |
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by kolbrun on
Wednesday, 19th March 2003 @ 07:40:32 AM AEST
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| I really like this It makes the mermaid come to lofe! |
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by WordPoet on
Thursday, 20th March 2003 @ 10:03:45 PM AEST
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So tender and simple. This poem touches the hidden treasures that dwell deep within and bring them gently to the surface. Beautiful write.
Doug |
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by Cynthia on
Saturday, 22nd March 2003 @ 11:44:28 AM AEST
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This is a very pretty poem Nessa. I muchly enjoyed reading it.
"our love is so like a river
ever changing as it flows
and we two just a canoe
that must follow where it goes"
Love is grand isn't it? May all your wishes and dreams come true my friend.
*S* Cynthia |
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 22nd March 2003 @ 11:08:08 PM AEST
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| written with pure and deep love, if you had met sooner you might be up the creek without a paddle now, so your heart is open to love and i can feel your longing and desire. love to you and thank you for your beautiful words, romance is still alive! |
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by The_Phantom on
Sunday, 23rd March 2003 @ 01:05:05 AM AEST
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Let me get my two cents in here dear ladyfawn, I'm not greedy I only want a little love, LoL the words flow so true, it's a look into your soul as beauitiful as it is, what an awsome show of love, please give me your autograph. I love this masterpiece.
The Phantom |
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by Bongo on
Sunday, 23rd March 2003 @ 01:44:08 AM AEST
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This poem is absolutely wonderful and a credit to you. It expresses beautifully what all of us have, or, are still enduring in our lives. After having read this many times, i went a little further and accessed the dictionary for the word PARAMOUR to make sure that i had a complete understanding.
Have saved this writing, and to you "LADYFAWN".....
TOP OF THE CLASS !!!! |
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by nikkie on
Sunday, 23rd March 2003 @ 07:55:04 PM AEST
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| great write u are always wrtein wih passion and that is good i luv the poem keep doin wut u do! ~Nikkie~ |
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Sunday, 23rd March 2003 @ 11:15:41 PM AEST
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OMG!! I don't know how I missed this.... Ness this is so lovely....your words just stand out aand shout of your love....
I love this verse the best---->
"with your dear love in my life
i am never ever feeling alone
ahh, times i wish we'd met sooner
though would we have known? "
Hugs, Jeni |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 24th March 2003 @ 06:40:51 AM AEST
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Very heart touching....
Really I have found in your heart that like you are lady of our tribe. Same feelings same subtle thoughts.
Because we are having same mental blood group, same heart feelings, and same emotionas. Like child is crying when its favourite toy missing, we are alwys doing same when our heart missing.... Because heart is same.
Now we are talking about love...
you have found already here billions theories of Love. But in the bulk nominations of our feeling towards Love is very extra ordinary.
I think that Love is a bird which dwells in an strage mountains. Like the Greek gods it is cruel, but there is a sweet pain in it. and we are dying for that pain. Some extend the the Doctors are calling it the Sadism or Masochism... But none any knows the Feelings of Love except the Object of Love.
When a human fallen Love that means The human feels monotonious feelings. Withour love human is a part of society, but after love he feels strangehood.
Same are in your poem. The Fear, Happiness, and all.
I have felt really good stuff and found like the echo of my own sound...
You are in front of mirror when you are saying the poem. and beside of you the shadow would be mine.
My Dear you are not alone in this alien world, but feel our feelings which are at your heart.
Fayaz Buriro
fayazburiro@yahoo.com
www.authorsden.com/fayazburiro |
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by knowWhat_kind on
Wednesday, 26th March 2003 @ 12:39:15 AM AEST
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| That was a great poem even though i am young and have never really felt love i think that was beautiful |
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by banjo on
Wednesday, 26th March 2003 @ 08:33:10 PM AEST
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you have a good ear for meter, but your rhyme scheme hits snags. what happened to it in the second stanza?
i really like the line "what wind does to fires". what a good metaphor. it has the potential to be great, the but the fourth line bogs down...
the last stanza is Garth Brooks, almost word for word (I'm a little embarassed that I even know that.) I think you can do better.
worth a rewrite!
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Re: oh paramor
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 26th March 2003 @ 09:36:28 PM AEST
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well, banjo, thanks i think lol, could you be more specific on what my 'snags' are? -as i do not know your thinking on this, why don't you also enlighten me on my second stanza, i happen to also like it, and ty, i too like my, "what wind does to fires" ty, what do you mean only a 'potential' to be a good metaphor? it is lol, the forth line there is a well done rhyme, too, please elaborate; "but the fourth line bogs down..." and also, i do not play country music in my house and have no idea what song you are referring to by garth brooks, i would like to know now out of curiousity, i assure you it was my thoughts at the time of my writing, and the man i wrote this to has a little saying about rivers:) oh oh and warm welcome to the site, have a beautiful day:) your writing friend, nessa
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 26th March 2003 @ 10:33:00 PM AEST
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| p.s. banjo, i exactly quoted you; misquoting me; as that was not my line nor thought:) |
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by XXXsilvervoodooXXX on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 12:13:56 PM AEST
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| so many comments on this already stating how beautiful this is.. but i just thought i would let u know one more time.. its beautiful... :) |
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by vegastar on
Monday, 31st March 2003 @ 10:23:12 AM AEST
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| A wonderful poem, B-U TIFUL!!!! |
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by wyrd_faerie on
Friday, 30th May 2003 @ 05:39:26 PM AEST
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| oh...this is just so...well...just so beautiful...i can't think of any other words...wow...beautiful... |
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