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The Weight of Love
Contributed by
ucka
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Thursday, 13th March 2003 @ 07:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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The weight of love presses on the shoulders
And causes tentative steps,
the pawing of the ground, with toe, before you ask-
the weight of love pushes a gaze to the ground
and buries words
but perhaps the words arent needed
Love is such a simple thought pattern
It merely is-everything-two fold.
You are
And I will give
But what is everything, but mass
And mass a strange state
Of electricity and everything
Either on or off
Existing in things that dont exist
And electricity a hum, a buzz, a pulse
Love is now a pulse
Your pulse
my pulse
A pulse increased by the very thing that weighs us down
The weight of a hand to a cheek
The gentle convergence
A trembling kiss
Fingers softly intertwined
A fleshy mosaic, a pattern
A shared burden of expression
Expression is the weight of love
Copyright ©
ucka
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Re: The Weight of Love
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by tease_whizz on
Tuesday, 1st April 2003 @ 12:13:16 PM AEST
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| this is truly beautiful - abstract moments contrasted with realism. 'expression is the weight of love' - a philosophical gem. hope to read more of your work, Kate x |
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Re: The Weight of Love
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by northcoast on
Wednesday, 2nd April 2003 @ 07:59:22 PM AEST
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| I have to thank tease_whizz for a good review of a beautiful poem. I read it too quickly the first time through and failed to see the concrete images. Her insight made me read it again, more slowly and with imagination. The pictures here are so perceptively familiar, without being cliche, that they locate the more abstract description and allow it to bear meaning that is unrestricted but not inchoate. |
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Re: The Weight of Love
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by kolbrun on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 12:10:48 PM AEST
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| Expression is the weight of love?beautiful ending... good write |
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Re: The Weight of Love
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by razorbladerose on
Friday, 2nd May 2003 @ 09:27:44 AM AEST
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| Brilliant! You have a way of expression that really makes the reader think, which is so interesting! Please...keep writing and submiting! ;-) |
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Re: The Weight of Love
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by Merry on
Wednesday, 17th September 2003 @ 01:32:07 PM AEST
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ucka - I like your style - this is lovely -tender - tenuous - universal - very well written
merry |
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