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The Daisy
Contributed by
zenith66
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Friday, 9th May 2008 @ 04:46:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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White rimmed god, holding an orbed sun in
Exquisite concave, the blinding epicentre
Burns into my minds eye,
And the pure white arms, so minute, reaching upwards,
Shall their clustered spirits reach that
Bottomless blue?
What is it that turns them inward?
What guards the inner sun as night erupts?
Will humans ever understand such design
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Re: The Daisy
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by Collie on
Saturday, 10th May 2008 @ 01:56:19 AM AEST
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| I like that! I clicked on the title because its my name, but its very descriptive and formed a picture in my mind! |
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Re: The Daisy
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by SilverRain on
Saturday, 10th May 2008 @ 07:59:40 PM AEST
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| You turned something small and often overlooked piece of gem into what it is suppose to be...glorious! Beautiful piece of work! |
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Re: The Daisy
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by ZiggyB on
Sunday, 11th May 2008 @ 10:10:54 PM AEST
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Isn't it wonderful, how with enough thought, we humans are capable of expressing the beauty of smaller obects in life...that are often over-looked.
You made me really visualize the center of that daisy as the "orbed sun, " and the petals (white arms) reaching outward from it.
I also believe, that even as "night erupts" upon it, the "inner sun/orb" still shines eternal.
This poem stimulated my mind.
Excellent write.
~ZiggyB
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Re: The Daisy
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by freckle on
Tuesday, 15th July 2008 @ 12:35:45 AM AEST
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Loved it! And yes, what causes them to protect at night? One of the many wonderful mysteries of this world! And no, I don't think we will ever understand....only maybe, if we take the time like you did...can we be awed by the mastery of it!
Carol |
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