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Lousy at Love
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Saturday, 31st May 2008 @ 11:22:49 PM in AEST
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All alone at the end of her rainbow
In a bar called the Flickering Flame
She drinks to a soon to be memory...
Will he even remember her name
She cries to the tune that is playing
Some song about love turning cold
It's funny, they all promise rainbows
But rarely deliver the gold...
She's better off lonely
Convinced that it's only
a fact, when push comes to shove.
She can't shake the feeling
A sad heart revealing
The truth that she's lousy at love.
All alone at the end of his rainbow
In a bar called the Flickering Flame
He drinks to a life in a turmoil
With an elegant toast to his shame
He sighs to the tune that is playing
And empties the rest of his glass
It's funny, they all promise rainbows
But leave when the storms come to pass...
He's better off lonely
Convinced that it's only
a fact, when push comes to shove.
He can't shake the feeling
A sad heart revealing
The truth that he's lousy at love.
All alone at the end of their rainbows
Just a couple of bar stools apart
A glance and a smile and just maybe
A future of laughter might start
But he's awfully tired of rejection
and she's pretty sick of the game
So again, they'll just go home lonely
From a bar called the Flickering Flame
They're better off lonely
Convinced that it's only
A fact , when push comes to shove.
They can't shake the feeling
Their sad hearts revealing
The truth that they're lousy at love
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Re: Lousy at Love
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 1st June 2008 @ 01:08:19 AM AEST
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Hi Larry..Great to read another of your lovely poems.. I can 'hear' this one in my head... and feel it in my heart. It would make a great song, I'm sure. Well done, as always.
Take care
Jenni |
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Re: Lousy at Love
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by brew on
Sunday, 1st June 2008 @ 01:26:42 AM AEST
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beautiful, yet sad.!
Would be a good song
brew~ |
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Re: Lousy at Love
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by shelby on
Sunday, 1st June 2008 @ 01:39:47 AM AEST
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Waves at Larry then throws a huge handful of roses.
I wish you would grace us more often my friend.
I loved this write . Proves you never lose that special touch my poetic master of love.(smiles)
Get a hold of me will ya?
Michelle |
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Re: Lousy at Love
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by spaceotter on
Sunday, 1st June 2008 @ 11:56:21 PM AEST
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| VERY good. I agree it would make a wonderful song. I know the feeling in this poem and you express it well. |
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Re: Lousy at Love
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by sniffels on
Thursday, 17th July 2008 @ 03:23:00 AM AEST
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| um Surprise! I have remembered my username and password. That's a little bit sad of a poem. Seems like they are soulmates but will never find out for not giving it a shot. |
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Re: Lousy at Love
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 09:02:17 AM AEST
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hi larry:) this one is fabulous, i love how you entwined it, excellent images
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Lousy at Love
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by ever1der on
Tuesday, 5th May 2009 @ 11:37:23 PM AEST
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| I was looking for this the other day but didn't remember the name. It has a nice beat and If I could dance, I would. The melody plays in my head ... Really nice job. |
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Re: Lousy at Love
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by ChenoaShiningwater on
Friday, 28th August 2009 @ 04:55:38 AM AEST
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| ok you best be sendin this one to Nashville.Awesome country song...a real good feel in the words even though they are sad,but wow...LOVE IT!! |
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Re: Lousy at Love
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by MaryZayas on
Monday, 6th August 2018 @ 08:02:20 AM AEST
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| this would be great as a co-write (hint hint) |
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