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The world as I see it
Contributed by
roddy
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Tuesday, 17th June 2008 @ 02:15:39 AM in AEST
Topic:
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In the world I see, you trudge along in a mossy road network, in a desolate Times Square over the tombs of the sins we never want to face; your body as bare as the day you were born. You ram the doors to some abandoned superstructure mile high with thorny vines that blocks the way to the River Styx. That kamikaze charge toward the aspiration of freedom. You look around to see smoldering dust expanses, as the blazing wood piles tickle the sky sending a haze over that crimson sky. And when you look up...you see your life; its ending one day at a time.
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2008-06-17 02:15:39]
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Re: The world as I see it
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 17th June 2008 @ 02:28:35 AM AEST
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I found myself right in the picture you painted with these words. Nicely done.
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Re: The world as I see it
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by trini on
Tuesday, 17th June 2008 @ 03:11:03 AM AEST
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Very intense
Perfect amount of description, and I liked the legnth.
It has a really strong presence.
good work
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Re: The world as I see it
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by queenofcamelot on
Wednesday, 18th June 2008 @ 12:48:04 AM AEST
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i liked this poem it was a good length and i could clearly picture it
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