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No Moon
Contributed by
alibof10
on
Wednesday, 2nd July 2008 @ 11:18:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Looking up in the dark sky
The stars are shining, hanging up high
Beautiful darkness mixed with hope
A perfection that forces you to mope
An illustration of an invasion
Forcing a transformation
The dark night of optimism
The forces of love
The power of light
The shining of the stars
The darkness of the night
A picture of deception
A wish that never comes true
A fairytale of hatred
The darkness of the night
Spreading all over the sky
The little tiny stars
Extracting the cores of light
The phenomena of life
The emptiness of death
Looking up in the dark sky
Searching for the source of light
Failing in locating the cause
Realizing the beauty of the phenomena
Though the night is darker than black
Theres still an unexplainable intrusion
The question I was looking for
Why is the moon no more?
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alibof10
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2008-07-02 23:18:27]
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Re: No Moon
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd July 2008 @ 10:26:38 AM AEST
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I liked the words that you used but personally,
when you change styles throughout your poem, and maybe it was your intention to write it that way, it loses flow and makes a hard read, for me. I will look for more of your writes as I did like the stanzas...............Mike |
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Re: No Moon
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by ZiggyB on
Thursday, 3rd July 2008 @ 10:29:45 PM AEST
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I agree with lovewriter...The stanzas did change, but I also liked the words.
~Stephan |
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