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I'll Stick With Coke
Contributed by
BratFace
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Monday, 17th March 2003 @ 05:20:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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I went to this cool party
I even took your advice
Just like you said
"Don't drink alchohol"
So I had a coke instead
I felt really good
Just like you said I would
I decided to stay late
My God it was fun I felt great
I got a ride home with a friend
Little did I know the fun would soon end
My friend had been drinking
I could feel my heart slowly sinking
As the car turns left, right
Uh oh she has blurry sight
I feel pain the most horrible pain
And to make matters worse it just started to rain
So now I know my time has been cut short
So many issues I lacked the time to sort
I think my last thought
"If people only knew this was illeagal and they could be caught"
Copyright ©
BratFace
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2003-03-17 17:20:00]
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Re: I'll Stick With Coke
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 18th March 2003 @ 08:53:30 AM AEST
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I don't mean to be cruel but this comes across as amateurish. It seems like something that you have done in 10 minutes. Good subject and good use of language but I think it needs some work.
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