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Memories of the Snow
Contributed by
Nosaint
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Thursday, 7th August 2008 @ 12:55:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Daddy I remember
It seems not so long ago
Mama was lying face down
In the bitter red stained snow
What happened that day
To others is still a mystery
After all these years
In my mind I still see
Mamas lifeless body
Thats when the policemen came
Pulling me away from there
They kept asking me my name
Some say it was a thief
Some a secret lover
But distant shadows
Over my mind still hover
You were away on business
In a far distant city
I remember your phone call
Promising me a kitty
Still I faintly recall
Hearing your voice that night
I can hear Mama crying
It was a terrible fight
Then the loud bang rang forth
Piercing was the scream
But you held me close
Said it was all a dream
They told me I was wrong
You were nowhere around
But I found your wedding ring
Laying on the ground
No one wanted to believe me
A child so frail and small
And you an upright businessman
But deep within I hear the call
Of snowy memories
I finally see through the lies
Daddy, I know the truth
The snow is deep outside
I found a gun in the closet
I understand what it is I do
Time to avenge Mama
Daddy Im here to kill you
Copyright ©
Nosaint
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2008-08-07 00:55:45]
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Re: Memories of the Snow
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by shelby on
Thursday, 7th August 2008 @ 02:54:48 AM AEST
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OMG shari this is dark and chilling. You did well by this whooooooo Im skerrd I could see it so vividly.
Well we are leaving today.........
left you a message
love you
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Michelle |
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Re: Memories of the Snow
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by Crow on
Thursday, 7th August 2008 @ 03:56:08 AM AEST
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| holy crap man"...this is great, loved the read, a little darker? I`d say so...lol! very cool write my friend. Lane |
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Re: Memories of the Snow
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 7th August 2008 @ 04:10:34 AM AEST
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Wow Shari, this is blood-curdling!!!
Terrific write.....so real....
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Memories of the Snow
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by tifrob on
Thursday, 7th August 2008 @ 03:53:39 PM AEST
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I agree with everyone else this poem is chilling. It holds your reader til the very end.
Excellent!
~Me~ |
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Re: Memories of the Snow
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by ingeniusidiot on
Thursday, 7th August 2008 @ 07:32:25 PM AEST
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Dark and deeply chilling. It definitely holds the reader from the very first word to the very end. Amazing piece....
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Re: Memories of the Snow
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th August 2008 @ 12:27:00 AM AEST
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OMG
Shari, this is SO different from anything I've read from you. The
title seems so innocuous, (almost magically beautiful even), but the
stanzas are incredibly dark and foreboding! Great job at keeping the
suspense going throughout.
Excellent post, my friend!
~ Breezy
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Re: Memories of the Snow
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 9th September 2008 @ 10:00:49 AM AEST
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yeppers shari!!! omg i have chills! my skin is crawling! i dont remember a poem ever doing this to me! ....calming down now lol sheesh my heart is still racing --this poem is f n bloody fantastic!
hugs n' love nessa
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