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No More Rain
Contributed by
Hakiokusaken
on
Monday, 25th August 2008 @ 01:23:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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got no family, got no friends
I'm writing this as my life ends
Now my heart plays no music
in my head, im mentally sick
out in the rain and left to die
the blood i've lost left my heart dry
on the street dirty and rotten
I'm abandoned and forgotten
I did my time and the labor
now i'll do the world a favor
I grab this knife and did it deep
and slowly put myself to sleep
suddently theres no more rain
it seems i've ended all my pain
Copyright ©
Hakiokusaken
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2008-08-25 13:23:03]
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Re: No More Rain
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by Ambivalence on
Monday, 25th August 2008 @ 03:51:44 PM AEST
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| profoundly sad write. yes, life can be miserable/hopeless, but i think there's more to life than death. i think if we sad people appreciate life more, then the clouds will clear and the sun will shine forth. just be lucky to be alive becuz sum people never had that chance (i.e. abortion). dont giv up. take care |
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Re: No More Rain
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by allforyou on
Tuesday, 26th August 2008 @ 01:53:49 AM AEST
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i think u need to be possitive. i used to be negative. i used to write things with almost identical ideas. but i stepped outside myself one day and looked at myself and thought "wow, if i was someone else, i wouldn't like me" and so i made a possitive change. i started seeing the beauty in the rain. and how wonderful the silence was.
just remember. no one can love you if you don't love you.
besides all my stupid advice that u don't even need to pay any attention to. i did like this write. the last two lines made it.
-kara |
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Re: No More Rain
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by eeeitak on
Sunday, 4th January 2009 @ 03:02:53 PM AEST
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wow. this is so sad, and very beautiful. great write!
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