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suicide, suicide
Contributed by
maggot
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Monday, 25th August 2008 @ 02:02:40 PM in AEST
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suicide
suicide
it sounds so fine
tonight i'm going to make it mine
day is over, nite has come
they no longer call me dumb
this shiny blade
for me it was made
i look at it and shiver
skin tears, followed by a crimson river
my life is done
satan shall come
my soul is his for the taking
no more crying, no more shaking
my life is now GAME OVER!!!
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2008-08-25 14:02:40]
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Re: suicide, suicide
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by Ambivalence on
Monday, 25th August 2008 @ 03:08:41 PM AEST
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a very dark poem indeed. i like ur use of 'crimson river' as blood. but most importantly...suicide, it does sound tempting, but it's not worth it. we're all gonna be gone anyway someday, but try to make the best out of everything even when u face the worst. dont give up that easily, just appreciate that ur still alive, becuz many others never had the chance (i.e. abortion). take care
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Re: suicide, suicide
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 26th August 2008 @ 01:47:27 AM AEST
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i hope this is fantasy,
either way it was certainly emotive,
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Re: suicide, suicide
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by navydocny on
Tuesday, 26th August 2008 @ 02:13:33 AM AEST
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While it is good to get the pain out and put it on paper, as previously stated, I hope that this isn't an intention. Its important to be above what can bring you these feelings. Don't give in.
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Re: suicide, suicide
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by ingeniusidiot on
Tuesday, 26th August 2008 @ 07:11:24 PM AEST
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I have to agree with the others...hopefully this isnt a sign of your intentions. Because although we may not be able to see them through the fog of life there are so many things to live for. You are a brilliant poet. I look forward to reading more of your work. Another good job.
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Re: suicide, suicide
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by Solidsnake116 on
Wednesday, 1st October 2008 @ 03:45:18 PM AEST
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| Pretty sick dude, i like it. |
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