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Needles
Contributed by
navydocny
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Monday, 8th September 2008 @ 06:41:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Pine needles lain on a forest floor
Lest we remember forevermore
Where we started and where we changed
From once we were to this estranged
Just as the tree grows on each year
It sheds itself of the annum's revere
It drops to the rest, lazing on the floor
Lest we forget forevermore
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2008-09-08 06:41:09]
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Re: Needles
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 8th September 2008 @ 07:53:06 AM AEST
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very pretty, a gentle flowing poem...
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Needles
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th September 2008 @ 07:54:26 AM AEST
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Beautifully written and very serene. .
~Jesse |
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Re: Needles
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by wizard on
Monday, 8th September 2008 @ 08:26:45 AM AEST
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very nicely done,
i salute you,
wiz |
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Re: Needles
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th September 2008 @ 11:42:56 AM AEST
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Hey Steve! This is such a deeply profound piece. I find the energy and
contradictive quality in line 2 and line 8 to be most astounding! I
think it is what makes this poem so deep for me. But the use of nature
in life comparison is such a strong one, too. And you did it well, without
being cliché. Well done, poet!!
Be safe and keep writing.
~ Breezy
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Re: Needles
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by redsleeve on
Tuesday, 9th September 2008 @ 07:28:49 AM AEST
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| great post. beautifully short. if that makes sense. |
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