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thank you for the boat
Contributed by
lostrelic
on
Tuesday, 30th September 2008 @ 04:17:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Sullen and swollen unable to lick my wounds my tongue to dry to even try
Only wanting tears for something to drink, only something to grasp
The little hamsters fear of cardiac arrest is not so much a fear anymore
Life seems to never stop as late you all act vicious towards us?
Sound believable to you, yea me to wasted words with even more wasted breath.
I am tired my pillows filled with salt water from deep walks
My eyes red from too many suns all dried up from false views
Bones broken but still I stand, just one ugly skull when I go
This fire running threw me death in one hand the image in the other
So low on energy why do you harvest now?
I can not run you will not make me I will stand against this pain
This onslaught you throw at me your words only designed to hurt
Why must I have something to grasp, god world I fall to you now
I am drowning
When things go to waste and you decide this undoing
You all stand around this wooden box of mine
This box of empty shells, with a filled floor of busted dreams
As they gloat from frothed corners of spittle moistened lips
Throw your claws in with this dirt and teeth
In a warehouse called my soul my heart is in slow decay
Tempted with maggots and supple honey as minds lash in mind
Pink I heard you so well goodbye cruel world I am leaving you today
Where is my hanging tree filled with hungry crows?
My knots of distress something to swing over I am sure missing
Its was such a time coming it was well worth the wait
You park your boat of nerve in my waters
Fish with a blind side of depth
I do not want your hand to grasp
You can not say goodbye I will say farewell you are not welcome
Leave me to lick my wounds
Let me bleed tonight
I will call you cold tomorrow
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Re: thank you for the boat
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by Catalina on
Tuesday, 30th September 2008 @ 09:34:38 PM AEST
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| interesting write, not sure what stemmed this but hope things work out for you. |
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Re: thank you for the boat
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by Poetic_Punk on
Tuesday, 30th September 2008 @ 09:58:11 PM AEST
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very interesting write, i enjoyed reading it very much, somewhat lacking in structure but it makes up for it with powerful imagry, 'Bones broken but still I stand, just one ugly skull when I go' a chilling portral of all that death leaves behind and your refusal to let it scare you, i particulary enjoyed metaphor of the boat, symbolising your coffin carrying your remains and perhaps your soul? or both? down the river of death. also i loved the referance to pink floyd as an avid pink floyd fan and avid all round fan of rock music: 'Pink I heard you so well goodbye cruel world I am leaving you today'
very good write, keep up the good work |
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Re: thank you for the boat
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by karoody on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 03:27:05 AM AEST
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this is the second poem from you i have read. both left me stunned. i really enjoy the depth you put into your work. you grab the reader and keepn us hanging on for the ride. i'm listening for sure.
love and smiles
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Re: thank you for the boat
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by karoody on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 03:55:52 AM AEST
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you got structure, plenty of it, by the way. so much dark sarcasm in this write. i appreciate the tune for sure. so much pain. best of luck to you....
nice floyd reference :-)
kara |
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