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Lying Eyes
Contributed by
lnnie
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Friday, 10th October 2008 @ 01:21:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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It could be that the Thunder in your eyes will not reach out and strike my Heart Full Force.
It could be that your words will not wash me away to an ocean already full of tears.
Maybe I will not fall down this time the deep well into my quavering soul;
maybe not;
but I don't think so.
I might be misunderstanding you there in bed with her and not believe my own lying eyes; my ears might be faulty;
she might be the illusion I had of you and I. But I don't think so.
Copyright ©
lnnie
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2008-10-10 13:21:04] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Lying Eyes
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Friday, 10th October 2008 @ 05:59:32 PM AEST (User
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Welcome to our global family here at ypdc.
This is awesome writing.
It's deep, clear, moving.
Huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: Lying Eyes
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 11th October 2008 @ 08:43:06 AM AEST (User
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This is so sad. I hope its not true, and something you just thought up.
If it is something you thought up, I like how you have almost split the poem in two, the doubts and the realisations.
It seems like the whole feeling of this is shock.
Good write,
Phil xxx |
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Re: Lying Eyes
(User Rating: 1 ) by rebelwcause on
Saturday, 18th October 2008 @ 12:33:56 PM AEST (User
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this is a good peom i like that you were able to flow without rhyming good work |
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