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these thoughts
Contributed by
shizzle
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Friday, 24th October 2008 @ 11:35:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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These thoughts dance around my head
like the shadows a candle casts on a wall
I hate not being able to get this out
My words and thoughts are harder to separate
than salt and sand dissecting my words
to see if it fits the pattern of my mind
My actions seem somber and slow
while my mind races and my words stutter
But this pen might be the key
to unlocking this trap I call my mind
Copyright ©
shizzle
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2008-10-24 11:35:42]
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Re: these thoughts
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by Theshmoo on
Friday, 24th October 2008 @ 11:46:03 AM AEST
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| thats is good! but now i feel ind wierd. cause when I read the candle part about casting shadows on the wall it brought to mind that my last poem had something in it with shadows on the wall. but I swear I didn't get it from this poem.lol |
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Re: these thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th October 2008 @ 11:56:55 AM AEST
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| You've got some good depth here. Thanks for sharing this. |
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