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My Final Sunrise
Contributed by
jcvamp
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Saturday, 29th November 2008 @ 12:33:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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The sun crowns on the horizon
Scattered rays ignite the sky
The golden halo of the morning
Awakes the world, but here I lie
Pastel orange, pink and purple
Streak the canvas atmosphere
A majestic wonder spread before me
But my time is drawing near
This will be my final sunrise
A shimmering dawn for my demise
The songbirds call to greet the morning
And sing me one last lullaby.
Copyright ©
jcvamp
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2008-11-29 12:33:16]
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Re: My Final Sunrise
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 29th November 2008 @ 07:14:28 PM AEST
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I am becoming increasingly impressed with your work the more I read. This is a finely crafted work of art. There is a certain degree of sadness within it (due to the subject matter) but your descriptions have painted this with potent beauty. A wonderful flow and a great choice of vocabulary create a largely poetic impact. I am looking forward to your future writes.
BRAVO!
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Re: My Final Sunrise
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th November 2008 @ 09:53:15 AM AEST
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What an incredible description! I could picture the beauty of colour
perfectly; I could actually feel the warm glow touching my face! This
was amazing! How could anyone contemplate leaving a serenity such
as this? Damn beautiful poetry!!
~ Breezy
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Re: My Final Sunrise
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st December 2008 @ 03:01:29 AM AEST
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A very descriptive write about what seems to me to be someone's last few hours of life, for whatever the reason for the death may be.
I have dealt with a lot of death myself these past couple of years and must admit I was a bit apprehensive about reading this one but you have done an excellent job with your imagery. You made kind of a beautiful thing out of it. Damn fine writing.
Take care,
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