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Until Someone Is Nice
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
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Friday, 12th December 2008 @ 04:17:14 PM in AEST
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Darkness has stolen the day, blindfolded out the light
News broken, crushes like a rock on already heavy heart
Thoughts bleed into one another, emotions fight for prominence
Through the open battlefield of encumbered soul
In the still of early morning,as angels walked in moonwashed corridors
Tending silhouettes served but could not save
As the father left, discarded earth with the quietest of goodbyes
They spoke his name, closed his eyes and he was gone
Is death kind when it eases suffering, banishes pain?
Or cruel mocking master to those of us left behind
Conscience leads the mind where the heart cannot follow
Hope is the deceiver,now the mirror is cracked
How can we reclaim ourselves, rebuild with missing pieces
A part of us is stolen and will never be returned
Those haunting words you wrote to me still echo in my head
I am strong...................until someone is nice.
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Re: Until Someone Is Nice
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th December 2008 @ 06:57:11 PM AEST
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tragic story, i offer my regards, but the poem itself is very good. it explores the concept of death thoroughly. i particularly like this bit:
Is death kind when it eases suffering, banishes pain?
Or cruel mocking master to those of us left behind
an interesting way of exploring death. i would say death was both, but what would i know?
-phil
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Re: Until Someone Is Nice
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by emystar on
Sunday, 14th December 2008 @ 02:56:46 AM AEST
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Sorry for your friend's loss.
Incredible writing, Steve.
Hang tuff.
huggs, blessings,
emy
It's good to see you posting but sorry for the circumstances. |
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Re: Until Someone Is Nice
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 31st December 2008 @ 10:17:53 PM AEST
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| This is a really beautiful tribute to a friend. i hope you treasure the memories of her! |
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Re: Until Someone Is Nice
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by KatsMeow on
Saturday, 10th January 2009 @ 08:34:14 PM AEST
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Thank you Steve, for being a dear friend, and for being there for me when I needed one. I'm still strong until someone is nice...I guess I always will be. But I never expected my words to lead to such a wonderful poem.
Love you! xxx
Kat |
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Re: Until Someone Is Nice
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by thistle_and_fern on
Tuesday, 16th February 2010 @ 01:35:27 AM AEST
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Agree wholeheartedly with the senitment
Im strong....unitl someone is nice.
Well done for using such a brilliant description in a powerful way. |
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