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What We Need To Breathe
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Monday, 15th December 2008 @ 09:00:20 PM in AEST
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Who made you blind to what you need to see?
Open your eyes and wont you come to me?
It's not a case of what you want to be,
it's what you need to feel...
I could hold you for one hundered years,
be there for you to wipe your tears,
I would try to save you from your fears,
but you need to let me near...
I know you're lost inside but so am I,
perhaps together we can realise why,
we'll hold each other when we need to cry,
and we wont have to hide...
We'd stand up tall and never look away,
and through it all we would still find our way,
it wouldn't matter what the world would say,
we'd face them and be unafraid..
Who made you blind to what you need to see?
Open your eyes and won't you come to me?
It's not a case of what you want to be,
it's embracing what you need...
And this is what we need
~to breathe.
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by Loende on
Monday, 15th December 2008 @ 09:17:51 PM AEST
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A brave and braw write, my kindred sister. It's a deep and very heart-filled message as well. I love the breaking up of the last line, that worked nicely. I love the whole of it, but my favorite lines, by far:
It's not a case of what you want to be,
it's embracing what you need...
Lovely work, as always. You are a rare and beautiful soul and I hope you find peace in this. Thank you for posting it.
Be well,
~dawn |
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by shelby on
Monday, 15th December 2008 @ 11:11:02 PM AEST
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You graced the pages with your beautiful poetry once more. Splendid write my dear.
The ending is so solid and
to breath powerful.
My sister says ok JUST BREATH and it is so darn true.
Hugs
Shall |
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th December 2008 @ 10:50:23 AM AEST
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a beautiful write. it flowed seamlessly and it was so passionate.
-phil |
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th December 2008 @ 09:56:52 PM AEST
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Sweetie, it's good to read something new from you. I think I've
forgotten how to breathe ....
thank you for reminding me. This is an amazing piece of work here.
I love how calm and soothing it is. You have this uncanny ability
to always make me stop and think a while. And realize ... things
are not always as they seem ...
Miss you sweets ~ Hopefully I'll be able to get on more often soon.
Life is weird -- stay real. ^_^ Hope you are well.
~ Breezy
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Friday, 26th December 2008 @ 02:55:55 PM AEST
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A very lovely heartfelt write Philly.
I have spent a long year trying to learn to breathe again. Today and in the days to come I believe I needed to read this and will be returning frequently to remind myself what it is to breathe.
Thank you for sharing your strength and wisdom.
With Peace and Love in my Heart
~Shannon |
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st January 2009 @ 09:01:36 PM AEST
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This is an absolutely beautiful testament of love. And the flow? Wow... excellent. You are truly an amazing poetess!
Tim
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th January 2009 @ 12:10:53 AM AEST
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| Wish all people love and be loved like this poem.... very nice I like it very much.... |
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by venkat on
Friday, 9th January 2009 @ 09:09:52 AM AEST
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".and this is what we need--to breathe"..
a nice conclusion. Its a beautiful poem.
Quite refreshing. venkat |
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by EcuaOrgullo310 on
Tuesday, 20th January 2009 @ 06:30:36 PM AEST
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| this was beautiful. |
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 5th February 2009 @ 03:41:46 PM AEST
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...seems tp be an indepth expression of a desire for a deep intimate relationship.with a long term commitment. It strikes me as a very romantic and loving gentle expression of intimacy.
Good write
Will |
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Re: What We Need To Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 22nd April 2009 @ 06:57:13 AM AEST
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Great advice, so much so that it brings to mind a question; Why is it that it's so much easier to give good advice to others, but be so blind as to not take it yourself?
I feel I am often a victim of this.
Great piece lil sis. |
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