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Dance Party Massacre
Contributed by
razorbladekisses
on
Monday, 22nd December 2008 @ 04:02:52 AM in AEST
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Dancing hand in hand
This mask party is a hit
Malicious laughs, the evilest grins
We're all introduced a little differently
Some better than others
A dance floor covered in broken glass
They told us to wear no shoes
A party drowning in blood
No one said we needed oxygen
Porcelain masks
Never knew strangers could be so scary
Party turned riot
Locked doors, no escape
Fallen candles
Red gasoline
Fear driven
This massacre was bound to happen
Malicious laughs, the evilest grins
Never knew strangers could be so scary
A dance floor covered in broken glass
A party drowning in blood
This massacre was bound to happen
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2008-12-22 04:02:52]
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Re: Dance Party Massacre
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd December 2008 @ 06:05:35 AM AEST
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well, how dark. joy turned to misery in an instant. great write, very vivid.
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Re: Dance Party Massacre
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by Mars on
Monday, 22nd December 2008 @ 10:41:57 AM AEST
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| I agree, there is a sharp drop in the level of happiness or contentness in the poem; Not that that's a bad thing. I'm not too much of a fan of repetition as you see in lyrical poems, but that's ok, it was your intention and I'm not the one to change you. Overall, 3rd poem or not, good job =P. |
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