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Modern Day Love
Contributed by
heyheyheydot
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Sunday, 28th December 2008 @ 06:05:39 AM in AEST
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There were rose petals scattered on the floor,
A wonderful scenario Im sure youll agree.
The windows were open and so was the door,
He sat on the sofa and listened to her plea.
Her words meant nothing, nothing to him.
He quietly told her, his name was... Tim.
A mumbled cry escaped her lips,
Her mouth was closed with a dozen bull clips.
He closed the boot to his ford escort.
The lamp lit pavement enhanced his shadow.
He used her money for the car he had bought,
She wasnt to know where theyd go.
Her skin was as dark as the moonlit sky,
This was the reason she was going to die.
He parked outside a disused warehouse,
That inhabited not even a mouse.
There was a bathtub in the middle,
He gave the bleach tap a twiddle.
She sat there,
In the deepest despair.
A look in her eyes,
All he saw was the despise.
The running bath was full to the top,
He took her gag out and cut the ropes.
He said Darling, clean it up with a mop.
He got into the bath with all his hopes.
He took off his balaclava,
The bath burning his skin like molten lava.
He said My love, I want you to see me die,
She said nothing but began to cry.
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Re: Modern Day Love
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by anomalei on
Sunday, 28th December 2008 @ 11:54:22 AM AEST
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very different with a lot of turns indeed...
incredibly interesting, could've done more with word choice but that's okay - i myself love poems that rhyme. it takes a lot for me personally to stick to a rhyme scheme.
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Re: Modern Day Love
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th December 2008 @ 06:47:58 AM AEST
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interesting story. i think the imagery was very vivid, which certainly helps anyone who is reading it. a good write.
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Re: Modern Day Love
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by Butterflyperfect on
Monday, 29th December 2008 @ 02:44:18 PM AEST
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Wow! Very interesting I couldn't stop reading it. Kinda depressing too. I really liked your write though. It was very dramatic, but at the same time very understood.
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