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Monopoly, Life, or some other game...
Contributed by
3660Days
on
Monday, 29th December 2008 @ 10:58:21 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Ive passed go
more than a time or two
you know
and I have yet to collect
my 200 miracles,
get out of hell free card
or promised someday soon
but property.
oh Ive got lots of that!
between backstabbed avenue
and shot-down-place,
and some others I picked up
as I raced from space to space
yes, Ive passed go
more than just a few times,
from those early days in red-brick-buildings,
a shattered Christmas dream,
long lost autumn,
smoke pierced by one stars gleam...
so many gos
and not one happy end
I guess that this must be
the game where no one wins
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3660Days
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2008-12-29 10:58:21]
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Re: Monopoly, Life, or some other game...
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by RitalinKid on
Monday, 29th December 2008 @ 08:49:24 PM AEST
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but property.
oh I’ve got lots of that!
between backstabbed avenue
and shot-down-place,
AMAZING! Are you from a city? Or Rural?
Sounds very urban..I dig it
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Re: Monopoly, Life, or some other game...
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by twick on
Tuesday, 30th December 2008 @ 04:19:44 AM AEST
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| this made me smile. I loved how you played with the words and made them fit a dark analogy. It seems unexpected because it's a board game. I really liked it and I don't think it's terrible at all. It's different and original and interesting. |
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