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Forbidden
Contributed by
knowWhat_kind
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Saturday, 22nd March 2003 @ 10:25:00 AM in AEST
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For not speak....speak speak I do.
For thou shall speak a million words a day
I speak I speak not speak i do not do
so you have entered the forbidden room
a room so dark a day would never see
Shine the days focused light upon me
Such words come to your mouth so scary so free. Such timeless words come to my mouth
too do you want to hear me speak.
Most beautiful as a rose your words do to me
Your hate like a thorn upon that beautiful rose
Can you see how your tender love and care will take me to a place, that forbidden room where we lay silently in the dark, neon room thats where you will find me speak.
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Re: Forbidden
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by wolfflow on
Saturday, 22nd March 2003 @ 10:43:46 AM AEST
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| i think its about sex but i'm in one of those moods today where i think everything is about sex, hmm, ok, i admit it, i'm like this everyday, is it about sex, do i like it, yes i like it very much, or at least i did the last time i did it, nice poem |
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Re: Forbidden
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by shelby on
Saturday, 22nd March 2003 @ 01:00:48 PM AEST
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| Yes I agree. I think its about sex. You compare her beauty to a sweet rose and at the same time compare her to the thorns. A bit of a shakey relationship? Yet you stilld esire her. |
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Re: Forbidden
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by wrn on
Saturday, 22nd March 2003 @ 03:03:23 PM AEST
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Maybe sex, but also maybe the desire to hear words of love from another, and welcome them into your soul and your life....mental intercourse, if you will.
Anyway, a nice read! |
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Re: Forbidden
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 23rd March 2003 @ 10:57:24 AM AEST
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ahh i love this, it is the most intriging poem i have read in a very long time, i will give my critique as you have asked, i ask only that you tell me kindly the one thing i do not know as i have had twice over devastating news, my thinking not clear, and know even now i will not be 100% correct;
"For not speak....speak speak I do.
For thou shall speak a million words a day
I speak I speak not speak i do not do
so you have entered the forbidden room
a room so dark a day would never see
Shine the days focused light upon me
Such words come to your mouth so scary so free. Such timeless words come to my mouth
too do you want to hear me speak.
Most beautiful as a rose your words do to me"
*this is so beautiful, i do believe that this is an excellent example of dark love poetry, speaking silently from the tomb, as in join me in the beauty of death, most of the words are of love,
"Most beautiful as a rose your words do to me"
*lovely! most beautiful rose, love is speaking kindly and lovingly,
"Your hate like a thorn upon that beautiful rose"
*perhaps it was a murder, words are spoken lovingly, yet with a hint of deepened anger,
"Can you see how your tender love and care will take me to a place, that forbidden room where we lay silently in the dark,"
*most beautiful rose, love is speaking kindly and lovingly, yet is angry, either this is in death or it is an eternal wishing, missing,
"neon room thats where you will find me speak."
*now this blows my whole concept out of the water and makes me know i am missing something valid to the whole over-all, unless the tomb is near modern day street lights when the loved one is speaking, such an endless timeless love indeed, or we are talking about something way different,
hugs nessa
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Re: Forbidden
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by knowWhat_kind on
Monday, 24th March 2003 @ 11:59:58 AM AEST
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| you have pretty much got what it is about i have some different views about it but thanxs for reading it |
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Re: Forbidden
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by Percursors on
Sunday, 30th March 2003 @ 11:32:23 AM AEST
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"Most beautiful as a rose your words do to me Your hate like a thorn upon that beautiful rose Can you see how your tender love and care will take me to a place, that forbidden room where we lay silently in the dark, neon room thats where you will find me speak."
I loved this it’s really good! It’s about LONELINESS!!! |
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Re: Forbidden
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by anothermack22 on
Monday, 12th May 2003 @ 08:45:23 PM AEST
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Well if i didnt know ya id think it was about sex,but i think it is about someone you love and you want for them to love you back
* neon room thats where you will find me speak*
that made me think of a motel,hence my sex theory ...but ne ways i love it...it makes you feel like you can feel the darkness
K* |
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