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6415+
Contributed by
catz77
on
Tuesday, 6th January 2009 @ 07:30:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
hbadday
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When I awoke today
The emptiness
Stood at my door
The dull and dreary decorated my walls
The everlasting consequences carpeted my floor
I anticipated silence in the halls
And decaying, I left my rocky bed
Dimming lights hung low
One bulb died
As I dragged myself to room 6415
The clouds forced themselves on my windows
Heat eminated from the corners
Not a sound made
Not a sound heard
Welcome to my mistake
My hate
For disappointment
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Copyright ©
catz77
... [
2009-01-06 19:30:06]
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Re: 6415+
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 6th January 2009 @ 08:26:53 PM AEST
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I loved the play on words in this write. Emotions at the top level. Good work here.
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Re: 6415+
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 7th January 2009 @ 12:04:48 AM AEST
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Last time I am having such days everyday....
hate that..... ;) but hope that tomorrow will be better ..... |
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Re: 6415+
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 4th July 2009 @ 11:32:04 AM AEST
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Again, the metaphor is well developed and it is clearly and eloquently expressed. Splendid stuff.
-Phil |
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