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Blind in Utopia
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
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Friday, 9th January 2009 @ 03:29:21 PM in AEST
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Blind in Utopia,imprisoned without wall
Living without living, boundaried by mind
Distant son of Adam, you will not dwell in Eden
From serpent's whisper poison leaks into the very soul
The daily bread is daily bland, life's palette is immune
To anything but bitterness, the sweet is now the sour
Submission like the nettle wrapped around the bud of youth
The sap bled out, no flower blooms now barren is the field
Blue ocean is a nothing void where sanctuary has drowned
Free spirit drifted out to sea with passings of the tide
Now you are owned, commanded, subjugated, shackled down
Where once was master, now is whore to the whim of destiny
I see the rolling grassy plains, you see the gorse's spines
Those mountain peaks I spy as jewels to you are sharpened teeth
As grain is ground, so too is will, ambition swiftly culled
Your world has crumbled into dust, but only in your eyes
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Re: Blind in Utopia
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 9th January 2009 @ 07:18:03 PM AEST
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you certainly make a good point. people should be more positive about where they live, for their own sake. good write.
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Re: Blind in Utopia
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by shelby on
Saturday, 10th January 2009 @ 11:29:54 AM AEST
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My friend you captured many of my thoughts within this beautiful poem. It is so sad that in these hard times people do not pull together and appreciate the gifts that money wont buy.
Yes our world is full of woe and troubles right now, people losing jobs, homes, low on funds.
But ya know what? I can find a meadow, a pond full of wild life with trees and calm right in the middle of an asphalt covered city with to many cars. We must look to find out beauty and it is so very much there!
That all being said, sorry for the ramble, I loved this poem. I cannot pick a favorite part, entire write is full of everything beautiful and good.
Hugsssssssssssss
Miichelle
Lets start a beauty of nature movement my friend!
We can carry a stick and smack all those ugly people with it ROFLMAO (kidding) I am just tired of people being so hateful and ugly these days around me. I try to envision them as pretty to0 but ya know some just make it impossible damn it! LOL |
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Re: Blind in Utopia
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by emystar on
Sunday, 11th January 2009 @ 12:17:32 AM AEST
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Incredible writing, my friend.
Awesome.
Huggs, smiles, and blessings,
emy
Luv that title. |
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Re: Blind in Utopia
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th January 2009 @ 01:54:19 PM AEST
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| This is an excellent write and congrats on getting 100 poems on this site! |
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