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Tanks on empty
Contributed by
Voice of the Silent
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Tuesday, 20th January 2009 @ 02:04:28 AM in AEST
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Since I can't think of a new poem I'll share some with you from my journal hope you like it
My tank has gone to empty
If only you could see me
I'd be a disgrace
You'd probably have a glare on your face
You'd think I'm not even of the human race
If you could see me
You'd now I've given up
And know my tanks on empty
Because now I know I'm antisocial
I now know I'm not normal
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Re: Tanks on empty
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by gmcse8 on
Tuesday, 20th January 2009 @ 10:21:37 AM AEST
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This one was interesting. I was intrigued by the title. I have not been writing for very long, and always am amazed when some one pens a really nice title that tweaks my interest since I am not good at titles. I for some reason liked the last two lines and I am not sure why. Maybe just the words you chose, or the way they flowed, I really am not quite sure why. I have had that same thought expressed at one time or another by all my children. Dig more of these out of your journal, they are an interesting read.
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