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no small wonder
Contributed by
elle
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Thursday, 22nd January 2009 @ 11:27:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I cried. we fumbled with notions of not knowing what we'd done. I wept. & empty, I sighed into breathe too painful to restrain. I collapsed my head onto your lap & we rode. . . drained to exhaustion with the levy of our mistake. our words fell away to silence, as if meaning no longer existed. You drove past trivial corners. . . through the bustle of life, beyond the cities' noise & drone. signs & sky flashed above the windshield & I realized I was no longer me. we, no longer we. we arrived, after a time, to a neighborhood perfect, by many standards. a home beckoned with the pleasant feel of care. . . the driveway. . . both sides lined with a sea of tulips, resplendent in their elegant buffalo stance. you whispered to me & took my hand. raised my head. . . "look" you said. you knew I loved the springtime. I remember, to this day, your desperate attempt to free me of the pain. simple treasures to heal my wounded soul. no small wonder. . . I loved you, so.
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elle
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Re: no small wonder
(User Rating: 1 ) by Incognito_Bombastus on
Thursday, 22nd January 2009 @ 04:45:59 PM AEST (User
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absolutely wonderful. word and time perfect. One of the best pieces I have read on this sight, the perfect capture of the moments is spell binding. Thank You I.B. |
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Re: no small wonder
(User Rating: 1 ) by Spike on
Friday, 23rd January 2009 @ 06:26:06 AM AEST (User
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lovely sentiment, elle; great metaphorical recounting and such lovely turn of phrase. A snippet of mystery with a wash of the familiar.
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Re: no small wonder
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd January 2009 @ 04:25:47 PM AEST (User
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This is a really good poem. I love the descriptive imagery. Thank you for taking us along for the ride in the car you had that day. You made it very beautiful.
Take care,
Tim |
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