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The Wait
Contributed by
net
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Tuesday, 27th January 2009 @ 05:25:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
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He listens now As he does the things he always does Praying to overcome This endless waiting He listens to the sounds outside Would they ever come closer? Let the handle turn For once Let the phone buzz
He drinks now Alone, singing As he moves around Posing for the phantom eyes The lights come down flashing Hands all around clapping The speakers are cheap but They keep the show going
So he sleeps He keeps the door open For him loneliness is a blessing But he weeps even so Whatever problems he has He keeps them for showing All the things he does now He keeps them for selling
In his heart he knows He doesnt want to be found But nevertheless he wishes And yet again he knows The best wishes are The ones that wont come true For they feed him They feed the music he likes The people he hangs around
There is a plan Hes on it for a while now The last show for this phantom crowd With all the pain he breeds All the tears he collects in jars Hes going to shine Shine for a last time.
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Re: The Wait
(User Rating: 1 ) by fanniesson on
Wednesday, 28th January 2009 @ 11:43:27 AM AEST (User
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I like this poem
but it needs to be tighten up
lots of words here not needed
of course this is my opinion
and it’s your poem
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Re: The Wait
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th January 2009 @ 11:59:40 AM AEST (User
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a very interesting write. the imagery was very good and held my attention. i particularly liked these lines:
The best wishes are
The ones that won’t come true
it got me thinking, and i like it when poems do that.
-phil
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Re: The Wait
(User Rating: 1 ) by InfinitePoet on
Wednesday, 28th January 2009 @ 05:55:54 PM AEST (User
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Bravo~!!! Wow! This was an excellent write! I love the way you describe the crowd and their eyes as phantoms! This one is unique to me
PepperMint~!~ |
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Re: The Wait
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th January 2009 @ 11:46:47 PM AEST (User
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No No no need to tighten it.... i like it very much.... good written
cheers |
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