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Winged Apathy
Contributed by
Live2Die
on
Friday, 13th February 2009 @ 02:11:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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My heart beats in my
head and its rhythm matches
your voice as your words
bounce off the
walls. your syllables crack the
plaster and your vowels shatter
the light bulbs, showering us with
points of light and bits of
despair. I catch your anger in my
handsthrobbing like the beat of
your heart. somewhere in
the distance there is music playing
and its notes drift through the open
window, settling onto your
sardonic words. I expect a magical
golden glowbut the swelling harmonies are lost in your
dissonance. Instead I look into your
eyes and they are sparking but suddenly
it is futile and I laugh and
climb onto the window sill because
my apathy has given me wings and
I will be
okay.
Copyright ©
Live2Die
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2009-02-13 14:11:11]
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Re: Winged Apathy
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th February 2009 @ 02:30:00 PM AEST
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such a fluid, beautiful, eloquent write. it was so vivid and the imagery was fantastic. simply superb writing, i loved it.
-phil
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Re: Winged Apathy
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by shelby on
Friday, 13th February 2009 @ 02:47:36 PM AEST
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I agree a flowing pretty write, and the word usage is wonderful.
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Re: Winged Apathy
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by Butterflyperfect on
Friday, 13th February 2009 @ 07:06:35 PM AEST
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I very much like this write. I love the lines " my heart beats in my head and it's rhythm matches" the best... but i'm sure that is my love of music talking...
Very nicely done!
With Love,
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Re: Winged Apathy
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by navydocny on
Friday, 13th February 2009 @ 07:30:57 PM AEST
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Very nice write here...
I love the transitional ending...I try to do the same with some of my stuff...it can be difficult if its an emotional piece...
Love the last line...
Great job!
Steve |
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Re: Winged Apathy
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by justinjohnoliver on
Saturday, 14th February 2009 @ 10:22:00 PM AEST
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| i absolutely love it! |
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