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You Broke My Heart
Contributed by
PoetryWriter11
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Monday, 2nd March 2009 @ 11:29:33 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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You broke my heart and now im done
I feel the pain has just begun.
You stabbed me in the back,
and betrayed my soul.
I will never be with you
id rather eat coal.
Since you broke my heart
and hurt me bad
You probably think I will always be sad.
I tell this i'll be just fine.
Theres someone out there for me
thats been waiting all this time.
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2009-03-02 11:29:33]
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Re: You Broke My Heart
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by MoonlightKiss on
Monday, 2nd March 2009 @ 12:13:38 PM AEST
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Aww so sad. I liked it. It'd be cool if you added more to it.
Some suggestions... It would look more professional if you fixed the punctuation and capitalization errors. I mean, if you write rough drafts like me, those are easier to do. In my first drafts, I abbreviate all the time and use 'text writing', if you will. But my final drafts are always spell and grammar correct.
Just some ideas lol. Don't be offended! :D |
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Re: You Broke My Heart
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd March 2009 @ 02:52:03 PM AEST
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a good heartfelt write. it flowed very well, which made it a lovely read. good work.
-phil |
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