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When You Leave
Contributed by
deadwriter
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Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 06:34:38 AM in AEST
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When You Leave
When you leave me, please close the door
I do not want the world to see me anymore
I thought in you I found a love that would last
Now you are just another part of the past
When you leave, please do not ever look back
Visions of you is one thing that my memory will never lack
Thank you for the happy times that together we did share
I am sorry that you decided for future ones you would not be there
When you leave, and I know you will
Forget that emptiness in your heart that I did fill
For now mine is the heart that will have the hole
Never again will I trust anyone to make it full
Deadwriter
03/23/2009
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Re: When You Leave
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 07:20:50 AM AEST
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| And if left empty the hole will remain |
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Re: When You Leave
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by ingeniusidiot on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 07:39:00 AM AEST
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I know exactly how you feel...I am going through the exact same thing right now....It is the samething that I am worried about....I thought that things were starting to look up for me but they went right back down and farther than they were before. Thank you for sharing and I hope that things begin to look up for you again and you can once more see a ray of hope. Great write...if you need anyone to talk to let me know man...
your friend
Rich |
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Re: When You Leave
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 07:48:07 AM AEST
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the feeling of emptiness and the emotion well expressed...
its a good write. venkat |
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Re: When You Leave
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by elle on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 09:12:36 AM AEST
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reminds me of a song by the cranberries,
"you'll always be special to me, special to me, to me. . ."
great expression of a very sad & lonely feeling. . . cheers
though as everything changes. . . the blessings & the lessons.
smiles. elle
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Re: When You Leave
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by redsleeve on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 10:02:33 AM AEST
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great write!
i can definately relate to this one |
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Re: When You Leave
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 01:23:52 PM AEST
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Hey good to see you back,
this poem is a song of your heart. Very emotional yet well written as you always do. I hope you are ok.
Hugs to you my friend
Michelle |
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Re: When You Leave
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 03:20:37 PM AEST
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angst-filled and tragic. very well executed and it had a 'punchy' feel to it i thought. good work.
-phil |
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Re: When You Leave
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 06:09:20 PM AEST
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Beautiful in its sadness. I am sorry you feel this way. I hope all is well with you.
Super write, as always, my friend...
Warm Hugs...
Jenni |
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Re: When You Leave
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th March 2009 @ 11:25:21 AM AEST
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Love, loss, hurt and withdrawal, a path too many follow.
May you love again one day. |
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Re: When You Leave
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 6th May 2009 @ 07:36:37 AM AEST
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Absolutely heartbreaking! I know of this pain and there is nothing one could
say and nothing one could write to even come close to alleviating it.
It's good that you have pen and paper, though. There is a small comfort
in allowing emotions to travel through the ink and pool onto the page.
This is lovely in all its melancholy.
Hoping for better and happier days for you, my friend ~
*hugs*
~ Breezy
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