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My Accomplice
Contributed by
Balmain_Tiger
on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 07:18:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I am so empty with nothing to say
With everything said before this day
For fear the day has passed me by
And my fate will make me cry
Your spoken words to heed my pain
To quench the thirst of the rain
To hold your hand and feel the bliss
Of when you gave that loving kiss
Leaving me cold in a strange way
So in bed late I will stay
Even under a warm blue sky
I kneel before you to ask why
On my sheet, my life, to leave no stain
And give me strength so not to wane
Your laugh, your beauty I really miss
I am nothing without you, my accomplice
Tuesday, 24 March 2009
12:56:16 AM
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Re: My Accomplice
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 07:42:02 AM AEST
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| very beautifully written..good flow of emotion and the feeling from heart. ..venkat |
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Re: My Accomplice
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by christsfollower on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 10:07:52 AM AEST
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Not too shabby, friend.
I did think some of the rhymes were a little forced... poetry doesn't HAVE to rhyme, and I'd be really interested to read something of yours written in (so-called) free verse. I hate the term, because it's actually much harder unless you treat it like some kind of blog. Regardless, keep up the good work, I really liked the poem. |
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Re: My Accomplice
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th March 2009 @ 03:18:43 PM AEST
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a touching, emotional write. good work.
-phil |
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Re: My Accomplice
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by deadwriter on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 07:07:57 AM AEST
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Very well done.
Deadwriter
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Re: My Accomplice
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th March 2009 @ 08:27:02 AM AEST
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Aw, very nicely written but sad. Good job and I can so relate.
Take care and thank you for an enjoyable read.
Tim |
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