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Running Barefoot
Contributed by
spike
on
Monday, 6th April 2009 @ 11:45:18 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Silence from the microphone
static, yes, but all alone
not even the borealis
is scattering its plight.
All across the firmament
stars blink there long lament
but people seem so reticent
to break the awkward pause.
Heres my call, I sometimes say
over to you, I hope and pray
but often times the emptiness
is all that bounces back.
Nothing makes you feel alone
quite like those friends never home
or smaller than a sound bite
when your words are unreturned.
Searching still, all the while
scanning right across the dial
here I am - come back
someone out there - come back
please dont leave me hanging
on the echoes of dead stars.
Copyright ©
spike
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2009-04-06 11:45:18]
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Re: Running Barefoot
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by emystar on
Monday, 6th April 2009 @ 07:38:53 PM AEST
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Very thought provoking, a bit sad but incredible writing.
huggs, blessings, luv,
emy |
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Re: Running Barefoot
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by crmnlilbruno on
Tuesday, 7th April 2009 @ 12:59:25 AM AEST
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| Very well done.. Great write.. Keep them comming .. Aaron D. Carman |
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Re: Running Barefoot
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th April 2009 @ 06:27:35 AM AEST
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Spike, my friend, you always have SUCH a way with words. You know
sometimes the wires get crossed and there is static on the other end too ... lol
Excellent piece of writing. I especially love the last two lines. Damn! Now
that is beautifully poetic! "..the echoes of dead stars." Sounds melancholy
but it is so exquisitely beautifully too. We all want more than the echo, do we not?
(I'm in love with the title)
~ Breezy
(I emailed you-- let me know if you received it, because I got two
from you together that were days apart--gremlins I think :P) |
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Re: Running Barefoot
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 7th April 2009 @ 12:15:54 PM AEST
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Beautiful beauty within these lines and here and there hints of blue.
or smaller than a sound bite
when your words are unreturned...... that is super!
The end so haunting and solid as well.
Hugs
Michelle |
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