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Once So Clear
Contributed by
MoonlightKiss
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Thursday, 16th April 2009 @ 02:43:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Blurring the future that was once so clear
We have scarred the feelings between us, I fear
And in this endless depression, time will wait for no one
I believe that now we're over; we are done.
Winter is coming; it's starting to snow
It's getting colder; there's nowhere to go
Tranquility is setting in, but within me, it's war
When all I want is the old furor
The fondness, the affection, the serenity within
The heartfelt obsession; your essence on my skin
In your bed, the alluring fervor
The sounds you make, I just simply adore.
But now we have faded; the desolation is real
The misery takes over; it's all I can feel
Emotions detach, everyone I avoid
Your infatuation with me has obviously been destroyed
The clouds open up, each drop like a tear
We have shattered the dreams that were once so clear.
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MoonlightKiss
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2009-04-16 14:43:21]
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Re: Once So Clear
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by 3660Days on
Thursday, 16th April 2009 @ 03:30:52 PM AEST
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| Lines 5 and 6 were pretty good, probably because they had a good rhythem (10 syllables each, each divided into two sets of 5), which is super important when you are rhyming and all that. Always a pleasure to read your thoughts. |
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