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Criticism from an Acid tongue
Contributed by
little_genna
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Wednesday, 29th April 2009 @ 08:39:10 PM in AEST
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I am not that person anymore,
Yet I am scared to my very core.
How do you have this effect on me?
I'm asked how can this be?
My anxiety builds,
As if my spirit yields.
It feels like I am fading,
And all you're doing is visiting.
I am not that person anymore,
But are you going to try to even the score.
How do you have this effect on me?
I'm asked how can this be?
For years your criticism stung,
From that acid tongue.
Now I am strong,
Because this is where I belong.
I am not that person anymore
DP
Author note: Please excuse how terrible some of this poem is. I needed to express my feelings and this is what came out. Some of it is very weak, I know that so please don't be telling me this is wonderful when it clearly is not.
Thank you.
Little Genna
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Re: Criticism from an Acid tongue
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Thursday, 30th April 2009 @ 08:00:35 AM AEST
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I see poetry as getting your point across and being emotive. this is in essence the value of writing poetry.
then along come the discipline. the discipline is an expectation of grammatical correctness. A series of rules to define how to express in challenging tones and grammar.
You got your emotions out! your point is well delivered and received.
Be the poet. |
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Re: Criticism from an Acid tongue
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by gmcse8 on
Tuesday, 22nd September 2009 @ 02:41:03 PM AEST
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| I have been rereading some of your stuff. I think this poem needs a sequel...... You overcame all those things in the poem you were concerned about. You are a winner, and strong and you should tell the people that read this poem that fact. It is hard for me to realize it sometimes,,,, but you are a grown-up. You were very right about one thing, This is where you belong. |
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