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Echoes
Contributed by
Sammywammyy
on
Monday, 11th May 2009 @ 06:22:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I had a dream
There was no more you and me
Only the words that make up what we used to be
Everything we knew was gone
Enclosing me in four walls
Blank stares screaming bold words
Of everything I had ever said to you
Ricocheting back were the echoes of your responses
Each piercing through me
Almost as if retracing my steps
Im rewinding back to our conversations
Searching for clues of if were really through
Why not?
Theres no point anymore ore ore
I still like you
What I would have given to hear that echoed back
But there was no response
No echo, just my own noise
Waiting patiently for a response
To the point that I couldnt take it
I screamed out Go
I got an echo, but it was the quietest ever heard
As everything disappeared
The riot walls now empty crash down around me
Emptiness floods around me as I leave in dismal
All I can do is breath
And pray to God to awake me from this nightmare dream
Even though the reality is the same
Sunshine enters through my eyes
Once again surrounded by blank walls
And I can swear I hear ever so slightly
A faint echo, I did did did
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Sammywammyy
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2009-05-11 18:22:39]
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Re: Echoes
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th May 2009 @ 06:28:08 AM AEST
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i see massive potential here. shave off a few off the rough edges of your poetry, and i think you can be fantastic. i know you have a natural gift, it is in your words.
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