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What Happen?
Contributed by
PoetryLeader
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Tuesday, 2nd June 2009 @ 05:26:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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I Needed You When The World Turned On Me
What Happen To When I'm Trap You Will Set Me Free
I Needed You When I Conflicted In My Brain
What Happen To You Being Joy To My Pain
I Needed You When I Felt Cold In My Heart
What Happen To You Being THe Light To My Dark
I Needed You When I Was Drama Suffocated And Couldn't Breath
What Happen To When My Struggles Made Me Blind You Help Me See
I Needed You When Everyone Came To Me With Hate
What Happen To Letting Me Know That Failure Wasn't My Faith
I Needed You When I Couldn't Take The My Life Was Going
What Happen To You When The Blood From My Arms Was Flowing
I Needed When The Innocence Left My Eye's
What Happen To The Truth..... Because You Became Lies!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Re: What Happen?
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by PoetryLeader on
Tuesday, 2nd June 2009 @ 05:30:38 PM AEST
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| Sorry If Two Or Three Lines Dosen't make Sense I Was Angry |
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Re: What Happen?
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 2nd June 2009 @ 08:26:52 PM AEST
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I'd suggest you lose the CAPS... kinda makes it hard on the readers....
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Re: What Happen?
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd June 2009 @ 08:54:16 PM AEST
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I am in agreement with Jenni. I was originally going to ask what's up with the caps as it makes it hard to read but then saw her comment. So, yeah, if we think it there just may be others thinking the same thing.
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Re: What Happen?
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 2nd June 2009 @ 10:36:58 PM AEST
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It is a very emotional write, the readers could feel how you felt, which is very good.
I do however need to agree with Jenni and Tim, the caps are awful when used in the entire poem.
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