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Behind The Words
Contributed by
bubbles
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Wednesday, 31st July 2002 @ 04:06:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Anxoiusly awaiting to meet once again,
I can finally set my heart free,
Impatiently wanting you I just can't prtend,
For the minute its you that I'll see,
For we only talk a few times into the night,
We wispered words that were felt,
The words that were said they just felt so right,
Your words they make my heart melt,
Now persuing the dream and unspoken word,
What is yet now only to come,
Awaiting the touch behind what's been heard,
In my mind I wonder where did you come from,
Did you fall from the heaven's and into my sight,
Did forces beyond draw you near,
Our eyes crossed that day in my life you brought light,
In talking you sound so sincere,
So now I must ask...Is it to good to be true,
That your sights have fallen on me,
In passing that day who would have knew,
What's next well just have to see,
Will the touch be as gentle as you have once told,
Will the kiss just sweep me away,
If it all seems to click then I tell you I'm sold,
To the idea and all that you say,
So for that brief moment, a silent embrace,
The action will speak louder than word,
Each touch there ahead promise never to waste,
Always believe each word that I've heard.
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bubbles
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2002-07-31 16:06:50]
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Re: Behind The Words
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by norticus on
Sunday, 4th August 2002 @ 02:13:21 AM AEST
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| I can tell that you can write better. This is good in it's way - the emotion, prose and style is there, but it lacks any oomph. I'd give this one a 2.4 on the Nortiscale. |
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Re: Behind The Words
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by bubbles on
Wednesday, 14th August 2002 @ 01:59:38 PM AEST
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| It is hard for a poet to hear critisim, but thank-you. I know that I can do better as well. In the future I will try to add some oomph. |
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