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Karma is a lie
Contributed by
Voice of the Silent
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Thursday, 18th June 2009 @ 12:48:26 AM in AEST
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Johnny my friend wrote the first part and I wrote the second I honestly think johhny's first half is a lot better but I couldn't help but dd to it hope you like it
For those who think that karmas a lie
Dont forget to look on the sunless side
For what you put out will surely come back
Twice as hard and twice as fast
What goes around comes around
Youll be at the top and be knocked to the ground
Because what you do
Can come back and haunt you
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Voice of the Silent
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2009-06-18 00:48:26]
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Re: Karma is a lie
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by emystar on
Thursday, 18th June 2009 @ 01:49:12 AM AEST
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Well friend,
I think you both did a great job with this write.
Bravo.
Huggs, blessings, smile,
emy |
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Re: Karma is a lie
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by Loende on
Friday, 19th June 2009 @ 05:38:43 PM AEST
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Nice little two stanza piece you have here, Kelly. Good job.
Be well,
~dawn |
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Re: Karma is a lie
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by Kourtni on
Friday, 19th June 2009 @ 06:51:23 PM AEST
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this was really great(:
your half was just as awesome as your friend's.
only suggestion: change "and haunt you" to "to haunt you"
I think it would make the ending stronger.
Fantastic poem though!
Keep up the good work! |
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