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Have I lost my Spark of Life?
Contributed by
Elipsis
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Sunday, 9th August 2009 @ 01:31:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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My empty body is filled with tears
Into the darkness my light disappears
Thoughts jumping, like dust in my stuffy head
I dont move, emotions too heavy, soul is dead.
I never meant to upset her, was fighting for her, to keep
Now she addresses me like Im some specie of leech
Green eyes so beautiful, they take me home.
One green eye so grotesque, Im left, scared and alone.
Outside her cave, I wait Hope pray.
This time she wont let me in stay.
I would do anything to play a part
Endlessly longing the love of that heart.
Given the chance, I would, at days end, plead
I regret it from my heart do you see it bleed?
Name the conditions, you have my consent
Please come back to me, my Heavens sent!
Copyright ©
Elipsis
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2009-08-09 13:31:52]
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Re: Have I lost my Spark of Life?
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by lesoleilnoire on
Sunday, 9th August 2009 @ 09:27:51 PM AEST
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Beautiful piece of writing. I hope you get a happy ending to this situation in the poem. I am a romantic. Again nice piece.
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Re: Have I lost my Spark of Life?
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th August 2009 @ 06:48:27 AM AEST
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I liked it, it flowed elegantly and had some punch.
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Re: Have I lost my Spark of Life?
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by ammar on
Wednesday, 12th August 2009 @ 03:10:40 AM AEST
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It was very impressive indeed.
I loved the third stanza.
Hope you get your love back...
Peace
Ammar |
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Re: Have I lost my Spark of Life?
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by Elipsis on
Thursday, 13th August 2009 @ 01:50:59 PM AEST
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| Thank you so much for your comments, it's truly appreciated...And... Yes, we did work it out in the end :) |
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