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The end
Contributed by
carmela
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Wednesday, 12th August 2009 @ 02:36:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Here I am making rhymes
With nothing better to do with my time
You never did me wrong
If so, then maybe I would be writing a song
The smell of your skin is so familiar
Now I am thinking, where do I go from here
We said we would be friends
Both of us knew it meant the end
I still dont know if what we had was true
With all this pain, I wonder what I will do without you
Your touch never made me shiver
When it came to chivalry, you could not deliver
Deep inside I know there must have been something there
Maybe we were just unaware
Copyright ©
carmela
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2009-08-12 14:36:24]
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Re: The end
(User Rating: 1 )
by orphani on
Wednesday, 12th August 2009 @ 04:59:14 PM AEST
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you have the bones of a good poem here
but you have more depth then you are expressing
This poem is about uncertainty
that is the core of your poem.
reach for the uniqueness that is you.
you are talented. |
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