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Would any of you miss me?
Contributed by
Voice of the Silent
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Sunday, 30th August 2009 @ 03:23:52 PM in AEST
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If I just ceased to be
Would any of you miss me?
Or if with a knife
I ended my life
Let the red rain flow
Let the heart beat stop, and just go
Out of this place, seems like fate
This place is filled with to much greed, so much hate
Why would any of you care
If I wasn't there
You could care less
I might as well be a pest
So I'll tie this noose
Let it go loose around my neck,
And from then on I'll cease to be
Tell me Would any of you miss me?
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Voice of the Silent
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Re: Would any of you miss me?
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th August 2009 @ 03:31:41 PM AEST
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| OF COURSE I'D MISS YOU!!! You are definitely a better person than I would ever be. Im more of a pest than you. I hope this is just excellent writing... |
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Re: Would any of you miss me?
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by jenniferstein2006 on
Sunday, 30th August 2009 @ 05:46:32 PM AEST
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| you write like your my twin...of course i'd miss you! |
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Re: Would any of you miss me?
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by Tanman on
Sunday, 30th August 2009 @ 06:56:25 PM AEST
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| Yes I hope that is just writing and not a thought. I've asked myself that question if I was gone would anyone care? But you know we would miss yea |
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Re: Would any of you miss me?
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by emystar on
Sunday, 30th August 2009 @ 09:32:36 PM AEST
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Now my dear friend, that will be enuff of this kind of writing.
You know very well that I'd miss you buntches.
Take care, huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: Would any of you miss me?
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st August 2009 @ 02:18:46 PM AEST
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I am assuming this piece is an exercise in rhetoric, so I'll not answer the question,
(which I'm sure you already know the answer to, *wink*), but opt in its stead to
comment on the piece itself. Kelly, you have grown as a poet, both in skill and
thought. This is definitely one of your better ones. Just be careful with forced
rhymes. It can and does have effect on the poem as a whole.
Now write something about how wonderful it is to be alive and be able to
read, write and share POETRY! :)
Good job!!
~ Breezy
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Re: Would any of you miss me?
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by Ambivalence on
Monday, 31st August 2009 @ 07:18:03 PM AEST
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so overwhelming when u feel this way doesnt it? i slap myself in order to think straight, i'm sure people who know u r overwhelmed with TLC for u...well written piece
"Let the red rain flow" - my fav. part
take care
-K.Z. |
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Re: Would any of you miss me?
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by shelby on
Monday, 31st August 2009 @ 10:18:41 PM AEST
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I think we all think or ponder this subject, with that being said of course I would miss you.
Now if you write another suicide poem you will not miss me cause my foot shall be attached to your ass! Wahhhhhhh ha ha ha.
That being said, so the point is clear........ I love your poetry.......... No more suicide stuff though my friend I have a bad problem with the subject, KK??
Hugs
Michelle |
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