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time will fall
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Monday, 31st August 2009 @ 10:26:38 PM in AEST
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if it were up to me all poets would have castles;
to glance into the world as if time were gone...
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poetry transcending light, dark, time
moving souls in melodious rhyme,
silently written as poet's soul cries
read post humourously as writer dies,
~*~
betwix an between 'ere every thought,
lifeblood penned, heart torn, as sought,
alas eternity, silent breath, soul woe
'tis nowhere on earth poets shant go,
~*~
no, we shall not die; even after death
scraps of paper will hold our breath,
absolute nature conveys the notion
when forever after crosses oceans,
~*~
the universal essence shall remain
though things will not be the same,
poetic heart, soul, mind shall prevail
by the wind, carried on dovetails...
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12 - Carter burwell Bellas lullaby oryginal Mp3
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ladyfawn
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Re: time will fall
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st August 2009 @ 10:43:43 PM AEST
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This is absolutely beautiful...breathtaking...stunning...inspirational. I really do mean that. It brought happy tears to my eyes. We really can live forever in our words.
Oh and I love your wish.
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by The_Phantom on
Monday, 31st August 2009 @ 10:49:56 PM AEST
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OMG... freckin amazing write my dear friend. My new fav of your, a poem that sings truth to me. Thank you for sharing.
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by shelby on
Monday, 31st August 2009 @ 11:09:17 PM AEST
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Like a summers eve breeze blowing through the window, this touched me softly.
It brought a tear or two to my eyes as well.
I am so happy you posted, you are beauty!
Love you
Michelle |
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by LadyRose on
Tuesday, 1st September 2009 @ 03:04:38 AM AEST
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This is beautiful indeed!!!!!!!!!This is gorgeous......sweet........and light yet firm......
'poetic heart, soul, mind, shall prevail
by the wind, carries on dovetails...'
Thats what I want to die for.......
LadyRose
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Re: time will fall
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st September 2009 @ 07:21:36 AM AEST
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nessa thank you for posting. *winks*
This is so wonderfully versed hun. There is beauty in every line. But the last
verse is my favourite. Surviving after death through words, emotions and
feelings. What a wonderful thought. When time falls, to be remembered.
*sigh*
I love your author's note as well. And I am in full agreement. Simply
brilliant, these words.
*hugs*
@--->------------
~ Breezy
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Re: time will fall
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st September 2009 @ 07:59:26 AM AEST
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Wow! Amazing!
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by Tanman on
Tuesday, 1st September 2009 @ 08:33:41 AM AEST
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This is an amazing piece. Its like every line i read the meaning sunk deeper into my soul. It moved me deeply
I can't wait to read your future poems. |
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by myheartsvoice on
Tuesday, 1st September 2009 @ 10:17:14 AM AEST
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no, we shall not die; even after death
scraps of paper will hold our breath, . . .
This line is so mystical, what beauty
you write no matter what the topic, i
love to read poems written by real
poets, and it doesn't get more real
than you . . .
((((Nessa))))
thank you likewise, 4 your read
and comment, a pleasant day 2 u . . .
Ben
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 2nd September 2009 @ 12:16:42 AM AEST
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Dearest Nessa,
I am very late to read this. Forgive me my dear friend. entire poem touches my heart. Yet I would like to repeat the last stanza.
Great write as always you did.
hugs and love:-)-yours venkat
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Re: time will fall
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 2nd September 2009 @ 11:52:25 PM AEST
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DITTO friend.
Very awesome write and so true.
luv ya girl,
emy |
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 8th September 2009 @ 06:18:33 PM AEST
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I don't really know what I can say to this that hasn't already been said, Nessa.. It is all of the things people say it is, beautfully poetic, perfecty written and with a message so lovely and kind...
I had to comment too, even if everyone else has already voiced my very thoughts.
You're one of the best writers on this website, hun. You make the place glow.
Please never stop.
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th September 2009 @ 02:59:52 PM AEST
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| This is truly deep and beautiful poetry here. Great job! |
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by deadwriter on
Monday, 14th September 2009 @ 06:05:16 PM AEST
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Nessa,
Always through your writes there is light at the end of the tunnel and a path to follow. Such a beautiful piece to read tonight.
Deadwriter
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 14th September 2009 @ 07:43:38 PM AEST
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There is something moving and powerful about this poem, Ness...as with all your poems, but I think this one has a special appeal to all poets.. Thank you for sharing this...
Hugs and woofies...
Jen |
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by windowguy on
Thursday, 17th September 2009 @ 12:58:09 PM AEST
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Verily an outstanding poem
in tribute to Poets past and present.
Loved the line, "scraps of paper will hold our breath". |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th October 2009 @ 01:27:53 PM AEST
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This reminds me of the piece by Edna Millay, The Poet and His Book.
Very beautifully done!
...Oh! and the rest of you don't have castles???!!!! |
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by myheartsvoice on
Wednesday, 25th November 2009 @ 09:10:05 AM AEST
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Beautifully portrayed this was,
like a little water color painting,
and warm and touching to the
heart of this reader, ever so
lovely i found this piece to be.
((((Nessa))))
Happy Thanksgiving
Ben |
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Re: time will fall
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 27th November 2009 @ 07:51:57 PM AEST
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Oh Nessa what a unique poet you be!
I'm just so happy to have you back, and writing lovely poetry for all, for me!
In your castles, poets will live on forever and ever............your words our captor.........
I read this over and over.......new meaning each time.........
Your pieces of paper are sublime!
Warm love
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 1st May 2010 @ 06:57:01 AM AEST
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Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh dear Nessa, your poetry rarely changes...........tantilizing, inviting, wholesome, never boring. What a nice tribute to poetry and poets everywhere. If only the world was not up side down........then the poets could be remembered with a smile, and not a frown.
But not so with yours dear Nessa.........for your carefully chosen words with all their glory..........will never die..... away they'll fly on dove's tails, rhyming up the sky!
Love your poetry.
Warm love
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by windowguy on
Saturday, 1st May 2010 @ 09:46:08 AM AEST
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| "scraps of paper will hold our breath" brilliant, insightful line. A Poet's heart is a treasure to behold, as is your poetry. |
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Sunday, 2nd May 2010 @ 12:35:33 AM AEST
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Your talent for choosing the right words manifests itself for all to see yet again.
Inspiriring write.
Steve |
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by Breezy on
Sunday, 2nd May 2010 @ 02:56:25 AM AEST
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"scraps of paper will hold our breath"
...just .... wow! That line really sent ripples through
me. What a perfect and inspiring write! You captured
the eternity of the poet so well, nessa. Beautiful,
BEAUTIFUL lines. It's easy to see why you are a
favoured writer on here. ;) Your work is impeccable
and filled with tremendous heart!
Exceptional write!! Truly a joy to read. -- Achelois
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by aliopterix on
Sunday, 2nd May 2010 @ 08:13:39 AM AEST
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| Your eloquence is only surpassed by your emotive verse. This is truly inspirational, thank you for sharing. Aliopterix (Al). |
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by deadwriter on
Wednesday, 5th May 2010 @ 10:27:07 AM AEST
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Incredibly beautiful. Your pieces always touch so deep in the soul.
Thank you.
Deadwriter
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by greywolfe on
Sunday, 19th September 2010 @ 12:04:30 PM AEST
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| when forever after crosses oceans - seems to offer some hope for a tangible immortality. I'm with you on this one. |
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by deusdeira on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 02:04:01 AM AEST
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I LOVE this line:
"no, we shall not die; even after death
scraps of paper will hold our breath"
You captured the immortality of writing perfectly. |
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by hray42 on
Wednesday, 30th April 2014 @ 07:14:37 PM AEST
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| I like this one.. It "flipped" me around.. All over the place.. You're right, there is no place us poets do not go.. we go all over this planet as well as this universe.. All of creation is where we create... Phil.... |
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 20th May 2014 @ 02:55:56 PM AEST
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May *you* ever have ink;) So lovely. My two favourite lines:
no, we shall not die; even after death
scraps of paper will hold our breath
Yes.
~Scorp |
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by reprobate on
Tuesday, 27th May 2014 @ 02:09:07 AM AEST
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It seems everyone has used up all the compliments I wanted to say about this lovely write. So I guess yoi're stuck with whatever I find.
A truly gifted piece!
Thanks for sharimg,
Michael |
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by Beyfoxman5 on
Tuesday, 11th November 2014 @ 05:25:26 PM AEST
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Times, takes, time teaches. And you are right...if we could only get a hold on it. Thanks for inspiring me.
FOX |
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