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Stagnant
Contributed by
jessb3
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Friday, 4th September 2009 @ 12:38:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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She dies
One moment she is here
And then she...
Disappears
There is love to give
But none to bestow it on
The love sits in my chest
Stagnant
Time will help it slowly evaporate
Becoming the air
Becoming the clouds
Becoming the stars
That love will rise high above
Where I know she is running free
Free from pain
Back on Earth
There is pain for me
The love that is gone
Leaves behind a hole
A void
A void that I have lived with
And know how to live with
It is a part of me
And I accept it
I see the others though
They are different
I watch them struggle
They can't set the love free
They don't want to feel the void
So they seek to replace her straight away
To fill the void
To repair the hole in their heart
To transfer the love that is currently...
Stagnant
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Re: Stagnant
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by Antzus on
Friday, 4th September 2009 @ 06:01:46 AM AEST
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Good stuff. Though for some reason I feel like I want to hear the second stanza before the first. Then again, dealing with the celestial situation before the Earthly one is an interesting approach.
I know some people would think it silly to mourn a dead pet too much, but I realise the attachment we have to our pets can be as great as, if not greater than, a lot of interpersonal attachments. A lot of pets (maybe not goldfish) have too much personality to be replaced by another pet. You sound very mature in your grieving. |
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Re: Stagnant
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 4th September 2009 @ 12:30:46 PM AEST
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You've drawn out and placed here your very heart; full and bleeding.
Losing a pet is indeed no different from losing a friend or family
member. And it is just as difficult to deal with.
Grief is actually a good thing. It reminds us that we loved and were
loved. Your words give credence to this and (may I boldly say) help
in coping with that loss. Very emotive, this write. I hope your days
become easier.
be well,
~ Breezy
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Re: Stagnant
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by Kazzy1231 on
Friday, 4th September 2009 @ 01:52:23 PM AEST
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| Nice write,sadly I myself have just lost a pet so I know what it's like! |
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Re: Stagnant
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by JAMIEAG27 on
Saturday, 5th September 2009 @ 07:49:44 PM AEST
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| thoughtful! I'll think of this when I remember our beloved dog Chi Chi LaRou |
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