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Your Excuses
Contributed by
one-curly-fry
on
Sunday, 6th September 2009 @ 08:28:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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You told me that I was the last
I watched your interest sway
involved in anothers life
you eventually walked away
You told me it was trivial
in no way related to us
something you needed for growth
I shouldnt make a fuss
You told me that you realize now
that I am the only one
but say that on your return
only after his sotry was done
You told me you love my mind
I know you leave me unheard
you think you read my language
but you dont seem to hear a word
You told me that were so alike
but what of me do you really care for?
I, on the other hand, watch you
only shy away when I bare more
Youve told me so much
with actions at a polar end
I feel like nothing but security
barely even a friend
Im telling you now
excuses are all youre giving me return
I deserve more than this;
a partner with but generic concern.
7/9/2009
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Re: Your Excuses
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by emystar on
Sunday, 6th September 2009 @ 09:10:47 PM AEST
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Brovo! You got um told.
Good work.
Hang tuff.
Huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: Your Excuses
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by Xjordanary on
Sunday, 6th September 2009 @ 11:47:15 PM AEST
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| very deep and inspiring write. It saddens me to read this but i can relate in some ways. Your writing was excellent and, whilst it saddens me to hear this, i would read on because of your elegant writing style. |
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Re: Your Excuses
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by Antzus on
Monday, 7th September 2009 @ 08:13:24 AM AEST
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| This is a very tidy piece of work. Although you were the 'victim' in this poem, if that's the right word for it, it's encouraging to hear of the self-composure and intelligence with which you were able to respond to their swaying interest. |
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Re: Your Excuses
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th September 2009 @ 10:29:43 AM AEST
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We've not chatted in a while, but I've enjoyed your poetry in the meantime. This was a well controlled piece with emotions conveyed subtly. Good work.
-Phil |
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