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hurtin u ? ohh am srry
Contributed by
hetlerkh
on
Tuesday, 8th September 2009 @ 01:56:36 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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hurtin u ? ohh am srry !
scratched u ? oh excuse me !
..................................
i aint *****
am almost *****in dead !
***** overflowin ma head !
i wanna live alone in a shed
and get sm rest for people frm ma thought's *****
tired of trin to make ma heart mend
tired of all this pretend
i cant take one more offend
i wont repeat what i said
i wish i could go back to ma baby bed
i wont see this future ahead
i wont do this emotions spread
nt after people around me are just a shred
than to hurt u folks
id rathe be alone
if am overflowin emotions i will just bite ma own bone
i dont want ma anger shown
i will keep ma emotins always unknown
i will take this freaks throne
dont talk to me in this tone !
ok am selfish am in this ***** zone !
bt its too close till my hope is flown !
i wanna kill ma self huggin a lonly drone!
gurl am guilty so grap a gun
and on ma heart just aim
i dont know what the ***** i became
this is so far far lame !
no way to quit this game
i dont knw who to give for my pain the blame
i guess its ME ..so baby aim just aim
the fame of beein a freak i always claim,,
so leave me
leave me ..
ur free .
frm ma dump mind i will flee
what eva u say ! i will ***** agree
even if u want on ma head u can pee
bt plz dont ***** hurt me more
cuz ma tears are makin a sea ....
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hetlerkh
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2009-09-08 01:56:36]
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Re: hurtin u ? ohh am srry
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 8th September 2009 @ 01:44:30 PM AEST
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Hi,
I usually dont give a critical comment but this is just my opinion.
On the internet there is a place to abbreviate words, maybe on chat or phone messaging.
To me not in poetry, it takes so much away from something with a great deal of potential.
Cuz,srry,*****u, gurl, beein...... these sorts of words then alot of ********* it just takes away and I find no meaning in this.
How about an edit and post it again??
Sorry I really do not want to offend anyones work, but to me this is not at all poetry.
I think you have writing ability, let us all see it please!!
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