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A long awaited start
Contributed by
hungarianhaze
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Thursday, 10th September 2009 @ 01:15:24 PM in AEST
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My nights have been disturbed
For i new I had learned
more about my self
There is more life to be earned
More of my grin and laughs to bring about the day
I felt the soothing arcana to end my hearts fray
Many boundaries lay ahead
But tomorrow as if an essence keeps my anger dead
You taught me what was lead to be
I will have this outcome to twist my fate
Just be sure to remember me in your wake
My heart in depth with sorrow
Impeached , I leave with no friends left to borrow
My self revelation my mental revolution must all be felt
No more cards of desperation to be dealt
We turn to the endless tune of the band
I have been dealt a transformed hand
I embrace the light and do whats right
I am in no hurry
Ive gone, and remained passionate with self satisfaction
I will tempt to see god's reaction
I saw us as a grand view among the earths motherly bump
A developing sinew in gods entangled thread
We confuse impulsitivity with life
In turn we consummate the strife
We all must listen the settle winds of the earth loving call
Seasoned with love we must give all
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Re: A long awaited start
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th September 2009 @ 02:06:02 PM AEST
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A good write with some real gems woven in, like:
'My self revelation my mental revolution must all be felt
No more cards of desperation to be dealt
We turn to the endless tune of the band
I have been dealt a transformed hand'
'We confuse impulsitivity with life
In turn we consummate the strife'
Good stuff.
-Phil
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Re: A long awaited start
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by longhaircg on
Wednesday, 23rd September 2009 @ 06:22:42 AM AEST
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I've read all your stuff, your words flow, I see your transformation. keep writing.
thank you SP |
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Re: A long awaited start
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by Antzus on
Thursday, 24th September 2009 @ 01:26:00 AM AEST
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| I like this one, but I find it confusing. It sounds like a very positive direction has been chosen, but I still feel some dark undertones here. Perhaps the undertones just spring from your past, but are overcome with your current resolve. |
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Re: A long awaited start
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by emystar on
Sunday, 26th December 2010 @ 09:20:31 PM AEST
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Amazing.
emy |
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