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Painting butterflies
Contributed by
nissansweetie91
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Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 07:44:28 AM in AEST
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When its cold outside
I'll take a breath for
When the leaves change
I'll picture them in my memories
An when i do i remember the days
When a smile was a smile
A tear was a tear
Back when i thought wishing would make everything ok
An that a kiss would take the pain away
When your young you believe the world is all butterflies and rainbows
Than you grow up and realize you have to paint them yourself
Sometimes it takes a try or two to get it right
I learned this when you left
My butterflies flew away
My rainbows turned into thunderstorms
Lightning turned everything black
That last breath was the the first time i saw everything
Anything that was everything left
Thats when i realized lifes paved with pretty lies
Sooner or later everything dies
Everything except time its self
When its over for one, it starts for another
Now when its late at night and the sky is clear
I wonder what the stars are hidding
Because I've been asking the same question my whole life
An have never gotten a answer
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Re: Painting butterflies
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by TsunamiWaverider on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 07:58:57 AM AEST
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A very nice insightful poem for your Grandpa...who i am certain would have been - probably IS proud that you have taken time out to write for him. One small suggestion - ask one of the mods to spellcheck for you before you post as there were a few mistakes and it seems a shame to post a poem dedicated to your Grandpa with errors.
Nice work though regardless. |
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Re: Painting butterflies
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by LadyRose on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 08:12:25 AM AEST
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| this is beautiful......like a light bolb that went on in my head as I read....we all have to paint our own butterflies and rainbows......very nice write |
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Re: Painting butterflies
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by AnthonyGoodwinJnr on
Tuesday, 15th September 2009 @ 01:40:37 PM AEST
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| Lovely sentiment, but it's a pity some of your attention to detail, like punctuation and grammar lets it down a little.I look forward to more from you. |
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