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Broken
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Tuesday, 3rd November 2009 @ 08:12:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Oh, broken soul, why do you cry, 'cause he no longer dries your eyes; what good is it to carve a path from eyes of love to broken heart? Why should you weep when love is lost, if keeping it, was such a cost to your sweet heart that holds such pain 'cause he is gone, but words remain.
Oh, broken child, you must not cry for love so lost, was meant to die, if he could scorn you, turn away, and leave you torn apart this way, why would you want his hand to dry the tears that fall from longing eyes?
Oh, broken heart, release your pain, and mend the parts he tore away, with sweetest lies and softest touch; betrayal hidden, in his love. Oh, sweetest sigh, you swept away, the words I spoke to make him stay, but unknowing he could not obey, my heart he broke, and threw away. .
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd November 2009 @ 08:18:54 PM AEST (User
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I bet if you come back tomorrow and reread this, you'll be as impressed as I am. We are our own worst critics, aren't we?
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Tuesday, 3rd November 2009 @ 08:21:19 PM AEST (User
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I felt each word, beautiful in its sadness.
Hugs
Michelle |
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd November 2009 @ 08:31:56 PM AEST (User
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beautifully sad, sweetie. I hope it was cathartic for you.
Another day, another time. Life tends to drive us full circle and one
day we cry for something that in later moments make us wonder why.
I know this came straight from your heart hun. And that is why it is
so beautiful. But it is also why it is so damn sad.
*hugs you tight*
~ Breezy
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by Alexa_Bachtel on
Wednesday, 4th November 2009 @ 02:02:25 AM AEST (User
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Great poem with the beautiful words, piercin' right thru the soul. Really heartfelt.
Good work. Alexa. |
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by pooja on
Wednesday, 4th November 2009 @ 11:52:18 AM AEST (User
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Its so much better than perfect, Its perfectly complete ! It has a wonderful classic feel to it...reminds me of old time poetry One wonders why the most beautiful things have more than a touch of sadness... Hope this is healing for you as well, keep writing and god bless. |
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by musicrox13 on
Wednesday, 4th November 2009 @ 08:32:04 PM AEST (User
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this poem waz awsum i luved it keep writing :D |
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 6th November 2009 @ 02:09:49 PM AEST (User
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You are indeed an artist with the pen at your command.
It is easy to write words sometimes, but to thread them together into a work of art is no easy thing, yet you have made it appear so
Great work
Steve |
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by spud on
Wednesday, 11th November 2009 @ 03:39:56 PM AEST (User
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Hi,
Don't know how I missed this posting when
you first posted it! Must be age ..... or the
glasses!!
Beautiful write. Every line falls lovingly into the
next. No cliches here - just pure poetry!
Tommy
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by silent on
Sunday, 14th August 2011 @ 11:14:47 PM AEST (User
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Wow.. Glad to see your still here
Awesome write with great flow of emotion, love your work
Silent |
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 26th April 2014 @ 03:53:40 PM AEST (User
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this is exquisite; from sadness you have created true beauty,
hugs n' love nessa |
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