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~Rainy Day Dreaming~
Contributed by
shelby
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Monday, 9th November 2009 @ 06:56:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Day dreaming at the window,
as the rain begins to fall.
The winds sweet song she whispers
golden leaves dance in the tree's.
A sigh escapes my lips,
could I maybe be a bit jealous?
Of the beautiful ball room gowns
I am dazing out just out side the window?
The colors so vivid and bright.
Adding glitz against the dark gray skies.
Demanding a poets attentions
each detail they want one to mention.
Oh a fall dance would be sublime.
Across the floors I would lightly glide.
Dressed in many bright colors
flowers adorned in my hair.
Abruptly I am snapped back to reality.
Back to gazing out the window.
It was still fun to dream,
my fall ball drifts silently away........
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shelby
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2009-11-09 18:56:03]
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Re: ~Rainy Day Dreaming~
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 9th November 2009 @ 07:42:26 PM AEST
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Seems like I missed the terrible part, my friend... This is a gem...
Hugs...
Jen |
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Re: ~Rainy Day Dreaming~
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by spud on
Tuesday, 10th November 2009 @ 05:21:43 AM AEST
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Michelle! I promise you ..... YOU WILL GO TO THE BALL!!
And it's not a bad poem - it's a lovely poem!
Tommy
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Re: ~Rainy Day Dreaming~
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by karoody on
Wednesday, 11th November 2009 @ 03:11:25 PM AEST
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Does she have to be home by midnight
To avoid losing a shoe
Or her chariot turning into a mouse or something?
:-)
I very much adored this write personally
Loved the metaphors
Very creative spin
Huggggssss
Kara
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Re: ~Rainy Day Dreaming~
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 17th November 2009 @ 07:40:04 PM AEST
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Oh...........Celle.............I was dancing away at your Ball. I love to dance, anywhere, even in my dreams. I didn't think this was a terrible poem at all!!!!
The terrible part is when you have to come back to reality...........no dancing allowed unless we make ourselves do it everyday, just like you say............write, write, write, and dance too...........every single day! Keeps the "Blues" away!
Warm love
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Re: ~Rainy Day Dreaming~
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 18th November 2009 @ 06:07:13 PM AEST
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Read this a few times now, Michelle and I couldn't find the terrible in it except for maybe your blahs. 
I really liked the imagery and the metaphors in a nice little day dream there.
Thank you,
Tim
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Re: ~Rainy Day Dreaming~
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 24th November 2009 @ 03:56:45 PM AEST
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it is beautiful, soft and dreamy,
hugs n' love nessa |
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