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force that open door
Contributed by
longhaircg
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Wednesday, 11th November 2009 @ 03:27:34 PM in AEST
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every day life has just begun, with each morning rising sun,
elusives dreams never seen, time past unclaiming vast fullness,
bright in dullness light comes, blessing unknown have been sown,
passing memories present tomarrows dreams unseen,
seaching for something new excite senses inside out,
feel alive not excisting, smiling laughing not caring why,
beauty in what is seen, others ugly see not me,
want to ride the breeze hair in my face, need to inbrace,
LIFE its to live that dream taste the cream feel alive once more.
somewhere out there I'll find that door.
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longhaircg
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2009-11-11 15:27:34]
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Re: force that open door
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 11th November 2009 @ 06:05:03 PM AEST
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I love the concept here...very much.
However your poem would have a greater impact if there were less typos/spelling errors.
(Forgive me if this offends you..occupational hazard of mine..being a teacher)
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